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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? v.3

Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? v. 3
The drink degradations has been rapidly raised and make a serious issue of clean water. The climate damaged by people due to the discharging of chemical waste into the rivers, lakes and seas. In this essay I will discuss the remedial measures and side effect of a dirty rainstorm on the communities and wildlife life. On the one hand, there are two major reasons why people are afraid of environment contamination because people acquire more money, so that they damaging the surroundings by dumped toxic waste into the rivers and that rainfall drinks by economically deprive people. As a result, the rainfall ailments has been ascended. The second reason of this is that, the vehicles spew obnoxious gases into the atmosphere and its deleterious to shift the ecosystem and ozone layer depletion, hence, the inner system gets damaged by not getting fresh air into the surrounding and sun rays deleterious for skin cancers. On the other hand, it is counterclaimed that, it is the fact that, there are many beasts, endangered due to drinking of hazardous drink, which affect on the inner immune system and raised the ailments. Since, the chemicals dumped into the rivers, folks are more associated with health problems, and also its risk to aquatic life. Further and even more, not only the rain, pollution jeopardized the heart, but also of the environment is harmful to the society. By way of conclusion, earning is not only revolutionizing the growth of living, so we all have taken steps to save the earth by reducing discharging squander into the drink sources.
The
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degradations
has been
rapidly
raised and
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make
a serious issue of clean water. The climate damaged by
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people
due to the discharging of chemical waste into the rivers, lakes and seas. In this essay I will discuss the remedial measures and side effect of a dirty rainstorm on the communities and wildlife life.

On the one hand, there are two major reasons why
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people
are afraid of environment contamination
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because
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people
acquire more money,
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so
that
Did you mean "they're damaging", "they are damaging", or "they were damaging"?
they damaging
the surroundings by dumped toxic waste into the rivers and that rainfall
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drinks
by
economically
deprive
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people
.
As a result
, the rainfall ailments has
been ascended
. The second reason of this is that, the vehicles spew obnoxious gases into the atmosphere and
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its
deleterious to shift the ecosystem and ozone layer depletion,
hence
, the inner system
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gets
damaged by not getting fresh air into the surrounding and sun rays deleterious for skin cancers.

On the other hand
, it
is counterclaimed
that, it is the fact that, there are
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many
beasts, endangered due to drinking of hazardous
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drink
, which
Did you mean "effect"?
affect
on the inner immune system and raised the ailments. Since, the chemicals dumped into the rivers, folks are more associated with health problems, and
also
its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
to aquatic life.
Further
and even more, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the rain, pollution jeopardized the heart,
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but
also
of the environment is harmful to the society.

By way of conclusion, earning is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
revolutionizing the growth of living,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we all have taken steps to save the earth by reducing discharging squander into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
sources.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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