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Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from the way that many countries are developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. v.2

Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from the way that many countries are developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. v. 2
The earth is faced with many problems and one of the biggest is air pollution which is happening because of the role of humans in the destruction of the environment. On the ground that environmentalists and people trying their best to protect humans' habitat from humans' activities. Accordingly, their endeavors' outcome is introducing numerous laws to force countries to intervene and preserve the environment. However, I adamantly hold the belief that this kinds of activities are not under the control of the people. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I will explore in the following. First and foremost, the ultimate goal of any countries is increasing GDP which is the value of all the product produced in the geographical region of a country. It would be achievable only by developing and encouraging private sectors same as industries and companies to provide products which both have high quality and are economical. accordingly, if governments interfere and inhibit the activities of a sector, it would not only increase its cost but also will soar the price of the products. Admittedly, with a higher price, government and private sector will lose in the war of competition, since other countries will not make hinderance for the companies to have maximized profits and they can supply merchandises with the lower price. secondly, a group of people believes that international agencies should oblige countries to protect the environment. However, I think that it not practical. As I mentioned previously, in the way of prospering, governments cannot and should not build obstacles for private sectors. Although they may vote for environmental reforms in the international gathering in order to preserve their face in the public and between journalists, the likelihood of cheating is a lot since they can take a better position in the competitions and provide products with the lower price to the world. in a nutshell, I believe that air pollution and environmental destruction resulting from countries' development is unavoidable.
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is faced
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problems and one of the biggest is air pollution which is happening
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because
of the role of humans in the destruction of the environment. On the ground that environmentalists and
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people
trying their best to protect
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humans&
#039; habitat from
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humans&
#039; activities.
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, their
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endeavors&
#039; outcome is introducing numerous laws to force
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countries
to intervene and preserve the environment.
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, I
adamantly
hold the belief that
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kinds of activities are not under the control of the
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people
. I feel this way
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because
of two main reasons that I will explore in the following.

First
and foremost, the ultimate goal of any
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countries
is increasing GDP which is the value of all the
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product
produced in the geographical region of a
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country
. It would be achievable
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only
by developing and encouraging private
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sectors
same as industries and
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companies
to provide
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products
which both have high quality and are economical.
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accordingly
, if
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governments
interfere and inhibit the activities of a
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sector
, it would not
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only
increase its cost
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but
also
will soar the price of the
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products
.
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, with a higher price,
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government
and private
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sector
will lose in the war of competition, since other
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countries
will not
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make
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hinderance
for the
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companies
to have maximized
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profits and
they can supply merchandises with the lower price.

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secondly
, a group of
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people
believes that international agencies should oblige
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countries
to protect the environment.
However
, I
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think
that
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it
not practical. As I mentioned previously, in the way of prospering,
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governments
cannot and should not build obstacles for private
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sectors
. Although they may vote for environmental reforms in the international gathering in order to preserve their face in the public and between journalists, the likelihood of cheating is a lot since they can take a better position in the competitions and provide
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products
with the lower price to the world.

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in
a nutshell, I believe that air pollution and environmental destruction resulting from
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countries&
#039; development is unavoidable.
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IELTS essay Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from the way that many countries are developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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