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Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. v. 1
The biggest concern in today’s world is pollution and environmental waste. As countries are progressing and become wealthier environmental problem are growing day by day which cannot be neglected. I totally agree with statement. First of all, in developing countries pollution is the main problem for the atmosphere. To become richer state, country depend on their industries which eventually create the industrial waste. Moreover, poor infrastructure also cause not only ecological but also effect the healthy environment. For instance, a research is conducted by university of Mumbai, 60% of total environmental issues is created by industries which include pollution and other toxic waste. Secondly, the effect of pollution and environmental issue on human health is so dangerous that it cannot be avoided. The smog atmosphere generated the toxics in air which increase the diseases of lung and throat. Moreover, it not only effect humans but other species on this planet. In last few years, we have seen that large number of dead fishes are coming on shore of oceans around the world. This situations become the eye opener for decision maker of developing countries. For example, in mid 90s London face the smoky and fog weather which effects the health of senior citizen and children. Eventually, this weather cost many lives which makes the policy maker and other streak holder to think about this and takes major steps to dispose the industrial wastage as well the air pollution. To conclude this, we can only overcome the pollution and environmental is to create the eco-friendly environment.
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today
’s world is
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pollution
and
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environmental
waste. As
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countries
are progressing and become wealthier
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environmental
problem are growing day by day which cannot
be neglected
. I
totally
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agree
with statement.

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First of all
, in developing
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countries
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pollution
is the main problem for the atmosphere. To become richer state,
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country
depend on their industries which
eventually
create the industrial waste.
Moreover
, poor infrastructure
also
cause not
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only
ecological
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but
also
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effect
the healthy environment.
For instance
,
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a research
is conducted
by university of Mumbai, 60% of total
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environmental
issues
is created
by industries which include
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pollution
and other toxic waste.

Secondly
, the
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effect
of
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pollution
and
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environmental
issue on human health is
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so
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dangerous
that it cannot
be avoided
. The smog atmosphere generated the toxics in air which increase the diseases of lung and throat.
Moreover
, it not
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only
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effect
humans
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but
other species on this planet. In last few years, we have
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seen
that large number of dead fishes are coming on shore of oceans around the world.
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This
situations become the
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eye opener
for decision maker of developing
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countries
.
For example
, in mid 90s London face the smoky and fog weather which effects the health of senior citizen and children.
Eventually
, this weather cost
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many
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lives
which
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makes
the
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policy maker
and other streak holder to
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think
about this and takes major steps to dispose the industrial wastage
as well
the air pollution.

To conclude
this, we can
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only
overcome the
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pollution
and
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environmental
is to create the eco-friendly environment.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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