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politicians are more responsible for protecting of the environment than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

politicians are more responsible for protecting of the environment than individuals. v. 1
The environment is having a very bad effect day by day. and many people think politician are more respectable for saving environment than normal people. I agree as much as disagee with this statement. To comments, firstly, government have to make strict rules for saving environment because of people must follow this rules. and government are also help to reduce environment pollution. for example, Gandhinagar, which is green city in Asia. creating the green city of Gandhinagar. government trise in different method. government starts encourage people for protecting environment. secondly Government have to ban products. which are harmful for environment like plastic. plastic are more harmful for nature and many country have banned on plastic. Because one material use to made plastic. This material is never destroyed. Thirdly, many people blame to politician for protecting environment but this is wrong. because only government do not protest environment for that people have to help too for Saving Nature. for example, Ahmedabad, which is located in states of Gujarat. Ahmedabad people always help the politician in protecting the environment. People encourage to other person for reducing pollution. They make to rules for nature. They follow this rules by people. This has been noted india leval. Finally, people have to ignore products. which is deprivation for nature. like people use public transport because of saving air pollution. and also people have to use Eco-friendly products. To sum up, Technology have increasing day by day. And it is also lost environment. And many people are doing harm the environment to live easy life. But it is made for nature.
The
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environment
is having a
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very
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bad
effect day by day.
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and
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many
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people
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think
politician are more respectable for
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saving
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environment
than normal
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people
. I
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agree
as much as
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disagee
with this statement.

To comments,
firstly
,
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government
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have to
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make
strict
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rules
for
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saving
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environment
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because
of
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people
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must
follow this
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rules
.
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and
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government
are
also
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help
to
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reduce
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environment
pollution.
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for
example,
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Gandhinagar
, which is green city in Asia.
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creating
the green city of
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Gandhinagar
.
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government
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trise
in
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different
method.
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government
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starts
encourage
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people
for protecting
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environment
.
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secondly
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Government
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have to
ban products.
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which
are harmful for
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environment
like
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plastic
.
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plastic
are more harmful for
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nature
and
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many
country have banned on
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plastic
.
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Because
one material
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use
to made
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plastic
. This material is never
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destroyed
.

Thirdly
,
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many
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people
blame to politician for protecting
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environment
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but
this is
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wrong
.
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because
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only
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government
do not protest
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environment
for that
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people
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have to
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help
too for
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Saving
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Nature
.
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for
example, Ahmedabad, which
is located
in states of Gujarat. Ahmedabad
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people
always
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help
the politician in protecting the
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environment
.
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People
encourage to other person for reducing pollution. They
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make
to
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rules
for
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nature
. They follow this
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rules
by
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people
. This has
been noted
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india
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leval
.
Finally
,
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people
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have to
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ignore
products.
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which
is deprivation for
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nature
.
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like
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people
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use
public transport
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because
of
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saving
air pollution.
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and
also
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people
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have to
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use
Eco-friendly products.

To sum up, Technology have increasing day by day. And it is
also
lost
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environment
. And
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many
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people
are doing harm the
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environment
to
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live
easy life.
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But
it
is made
for
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nature
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay politicians are more responsible for protecting of the environment than individuals. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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