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Politicians are responsible for protection of the environment than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

Politicians are responsible for protection of the environment than individuals. v. 2
Politicians are definitely made for the people. This essay confines my opinion on politicians to create firewall for the environment and the contradicting option of people bringing safety that they wish to see in near future in their environment. Firstly, politicians make law and provide the safety for the people when the environment is damaged by natural disasters. In addition, rules are made by government person keeping in mind of the issues faced by the poor people to eradicate theft, burglary, and chain pulling in society. Similarly, ownership lies in their hand as they are aware of the place they are elected as well as to make changes to environment by enabling electricity, hospitals and schools for people as promised. Secondly, members of environment also have social responsibility to view positive changes that they expect from the society. Moreover, businessman, can use more staff to solve unemployment issue of their area. Further, women can form self-help groups by inviting underprivileged women to occupy in aari embroidery, candlemaking, tailoring, bamboo bag making. For instance, women in a state built low-cost restroom for needy people. Finally, men or women can approach the local ministry or collectorate for funding to expand their social activity. In conclusion, both government authorities and citizens are responsible for safety of their nation. Everyone should save water and tree to protect environment.
Politicians are definitely made for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. This essay confines my opinion on politicians to create firewall for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and the contradicting option of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
bringing safety that they wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
in near future in their environment.

Firstly
, politicians
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make
law and provide the safety for the
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people
when the
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environment
is damaged
by natural disasters.
In addition
,
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rules
are made
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
person keeping in mind of the issues faced by the poor
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people
to eradicate theft, burglary, and chain pulling in society.
Similarly
, ownership lies in their hand as they are aware of the place they
are elected
as well
as to
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make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to
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environment
by enabling electricity, hospitals and schools for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
as promised.

Secondly
, members of
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environment
also
have social responsibility to view
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positive
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changes
that they
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expect
from the society.
Moreover
, businessman, can
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use
more staff to solve unemployment issue of their area.
Further
,
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women
can form self-
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help
groups by inviting underprivileged
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women
to occupy in
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aari
embroidery,
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candlemaking
, tailoring, bamboo bag making.
For instance
,
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women
in a state built low-cost restroom for needy
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people
.

Finally
,
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men
or
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women
can approach the local ministry or
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collectorate
for funding to expand their social activity.

In conclusion
, both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
authorities and citizens are responsible for safety of their nation. Everyone should save water and tree to protect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Politicians are responsible for protection of the environment than individuals. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
224 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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