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PO 04 - Question 2Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why. v.1

PO 04 - Question 2Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why. v. 1
Of late, the increasing influx of vehicles poses a great menace to the environment across the world. Many assert that rising oil prices would probably eliminate some dangers to the ecosystem. Nevertheless, in my opinion, this idea is an ineffective one which would rather adversely affect the common people. On the one hand, it is true that the fuel price increment might reduce the usage of vehicles to some extent. This is because middle class people will approach public transports and other alternatives at lower costs. It may result in the control of the emission of smoke and gases that hugely damages the living world. Thus, it might prevent further environmental degradation. On the other hand, it is undeniable that this tendency may make a trivial impact as most of the cars and vehicles are owned by the rich. For instance, New Delhi, the capital of India, where the government has recently amended this act, still stands taller in the list of highly polluted cities. In addition, even if the rates of oils are skyrocketing, the wealthy car owners can still afford it. Hence, I would say that it will hardly yield a desired outcome. I also believe that this trend would contrarily exert influence in commoners' life. Owing to a hefty fuel, toll, the diverse range of trades will surely be affected which would eventually rise the fare of basic necessities. Moreover, the factors such as deforestation, industrial emissions and so on primarily cause a great havoc on the natural world. For example, the more people vandalize the forests, the worse the effects will be. So, it is baseless to implement this act into society. To conclude, as this is incoherent due to its negligible (insignificant) positive result, the governments should come up forward with constructive measures in order to prevent detrimental effects on the ecosystem.
Of late, the increasing influx of vehicles poses a great menace to the environment across the world.
Many
assert that rising oil prices would
probably
eliminate
some
dangers
to the ecosystem.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, this
idea
is an ineffective one which would
rather
adversely
affect the common
people
.

On the one hand, it is true that the fuel price increment might
reduce
the usage of vehicles to
some
extent. This is
because
middle
class
people
will approach public transports and other alternatives at lower costs. It may result in the control of the emission of smoke and gases that
hugely
damages the living world.
Thus
, it might
prevent
further
environmental degradation.

On the other hand
, it is undeniable that this tendency may
make
a trivial impact as most of the cars and vehicles are
owned
by the rich.
For instance
, New Delhi, the capital of India, where the
government
has recently amended this act,
still
stands taller in the list of
highly
polluted cities.
In addition
, even if the rates of oils are skyrocketing, the wealthy car owners can
still
afford it.
Hence
, I would say that it will hardly yield a desired outcome.

I
also
believe that this trend would
contrarily
exert influence in commoners' life. Owing to a hefty fuel, toll, the diverse range of trades will
surely
be
affected
which would
eventually
rise the fare of
basic necessities
.
Moreover
, the factors such as deforestation, industrial emissions and
so
on
primarily
cause a great havoc on the natural world.
For example
, the more
people
vandalize the forests, the worse the effects will be.
So
, it is baseless to implement this act into society.

To conclude
, as this is incoherent due to its negligible (insignificant)
positive
result, the
governments
should
come
up forward with constructive measures in order to
prevent
detrimental effects on the ecosystem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay PO 04 - Question 2Many universities now offer academic courses over the Internet. However, some people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better? Explain why. v. 1

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307 words
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