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Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v.1

Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v. 1
Travelling provides people with new interesting experience. This may be the main reason why there is an increasing number of trips to isolated places such as the Sahara Desert, the Antarctic or the Mount Everest. Since everything has two sides, this essay will discuss some pros and cons of this type of tourism. On the one hand, tourists gain many advantages from the trip to those extreme areas. Firstly, they may become stronger individuals physically and mentally. Before a trip, people have to do extensive exercises which are designed to train their physical health to fit the journey. Likewise, they must prepare their attitude so that they will not give up halfway. We may all agree that these journeys require tremendous effort to reach the destinations. Additionally, travellers can learn surviving skills in extreme conditions such as how to keep your body warm in the freezing temperature of Antarctic or how to navigate to find water if you are stuck in a desert. On the other hand, there are some drawbacks associated with the journey. There are some incidents that threaten people’s life during their trip. For instance, if you travel to the Sahara Desert and you forget to zip you tent properly at night, you may be visited by poisoned snakes. They are extremely dangerous because you can die with just a bite. Another important issue is that the environment can be affected due to human activities. Recently, the Nepali authority, the country where the Mount Everest situated, has raised an alarm of the rising pollution in thiss tourist destination. There are thousand tonnes of rubbish which the mountaineers leave behind every year. There is a campaign cleaning the “roof of the world”. In conclusion, travelling to difficult areas such as a desert, the poles or high mountains is either interesting or dangerous. It is only suitable for people who have good physical and mental health. People should consider carefully before attending to such journeys.
Travelling provides
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people
with new interesting experience. This may be the main reason why there is an increasing number of
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trips
to isolated places such as the Sahara Desert, the Antarctic or the Mount Everest. Since everything has two sides, this essay will discuss
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some
pros and cons of this type of tourism.

On the one hand, tourists gain
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many
advantages from the
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trip
to those extreme areas.
Firstly
, they may become stronger individuals
physically
and mentally.
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Before
a
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trip
,
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people
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have to
do extensive exercises which
are designed
to train their physical health to fit the
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journey
.
Likewise
, they
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must
prepare their attitude
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so
that they will not give up halfway. We may all
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agree
that these
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journeys
require tremendous effort to reach the destinations.
Additionally
,
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travellers
can learn
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surviving
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skills
in extreme conditions such as how to
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keep
your body warm in the freezing temperature of Antarctic or how to navigate to find water if you
are stuck
in a desert.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
drawbacks associated with the
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journey
. There are
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some
incidents that threaten
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people’s
life during their
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trip
.
For instance
, if you travel to the Sahara Desert and you forget to zip you tent
properly
at night, you may
be visited
by poisoned snakes. They are
extremely
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dangerous
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because
you can
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die
with
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just
a bite. Another
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important
issue is that the environment can be
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affected
due to human activities. Recently, the Nepali authority, the country where the Mount Everest situated, has raised an alarm of the rising pollution in
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thiss
tourist destination. There are
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thousand
tonnes of rubbish which the mountaineers
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leave
behind every year. There is a campaign cleaning the “roof of the world”.

In conclusion
, travelling to difficult areas such as a desert, the poles or high mountains is either interesting or
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dangerous
. It is
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only
suitable for
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people
who have
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good
physical and mental health.
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People
should consider
carefully
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before
attending to such
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journeys
.
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IELTS essay Please briefly state your scientific and professional interests and objectives, as well as your career goals. Include a description of your past accomplishments that are not evident from the examination of other documents submitted. Report your results, i v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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