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plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. v. 1
Plastic bags have become part of our daily life, as we got our purchase packed into their bags. The abundant usage of these wrapping leads to various detrimental effects on the our environment as well as to ecosystem life ranging from terrestrial to marine life. Some people thought that plastic bag should be banned. I agree with this notion completely. This essay casts a light on reasons in details with examples. To begin with, plastic receptacles are made up of chemical name polypropylene which cause the huge amount of greenhouse gases during their manufacturing process. Asa result, it will lead to global warming as well as contaminate the air with harmful gases, which has a very harmful impact on the health of human as well as on other living creatures. For instance, contaminant from the processing of polythene cause disease like heart, blood pressure and respiratory on the living world who breathe in that air. Moreover, these poly is not degrading for hundreds of years. Therefore, burning of plastic also emit lots of harmful gases, which eliminate dreadful contaminant. Furthermore, polythene is light in weight, which make them easy to blow with air and travel long distance, ultimately get into the water. Therefore, which leads to adverse impact on marine life. For instance, some aquatic creature often mistaken to consume a poly bag as food, which affect their digest system and causes infection also, sometimes leads to death due to suffocation. Hence, poly material is poison for the aquatic life. As a result, for consideration of environmental, these receptacles should be banned completely. Therefore, the government should make laws against the use of plastic bags. Moreover, it is the joint responsibility of the community and the government to protect the ecosystem. Therefore, awareness against the use of plastic bag should be made among the people. Also, encourage the people to use renewable or paper bag for purchasing groceries and other household goods. In addition, the government should be fined high to those shopkeeper who used such kind of material for packing the buying items. To conclude this statement, the polythene is a boon for the environment as well as for the terrestrial and marine creature because its production and processing create a lot of pollutants in the air and water. As a result, government and society should create the awareness among the population to use of a cloth bag and renewable bags for their shopping.
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bags
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life
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purchase
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bags
. The abundant usage of these wrapping leads to various detrimental effects on
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the our environment
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ranging from terrestrial to marine
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life
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people
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plastic
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bag
should
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. I
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agree
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details
with examples.

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receptacles
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up of chemical name polypropylene which cause the huge amount of greenhouse gases during their manufacturing process.
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, it will
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lead
to global warming as
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as contaminate the
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air
with harmful gases, which has a
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very
harmful impact on the health of human as
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as on other living creatures.
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air
.
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poly
is not degrading for hundreds of years.
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Therefore
, burning of
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plastic
also
emit lots of harmful gases, which eliminate dreadful contaminant.
Furthermore
, polythene is
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light in weight
, which
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make
them easy to blow with
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air
and travel long distance,
ultimately
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get
into the water.
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, which leads to adverse impact on marine
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.
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,
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some
aquatic creature
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often
mistaken to consume a
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as food, which affect their digest system and causes infection
also
,
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sometimes
leads to death due to suffocation.
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,
poly
material is poison for the aquatic life.

As a result
, for consideration of environmental, these receptacles should
be banned
completely.
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Therefore
, the
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government
should
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laws against the
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use
of
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plastic
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bags
.
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, it is the joint responsibility of the community and the
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government
to protect the ecosystem.
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Therefore
, awareness against the
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use
of
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plastic
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should
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.
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, encourage the
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renewable or paper
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bag
for purchasing groceries and other household
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goods
.
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, the
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government
should
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high to
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those shopkeeper
who
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used
such kind of material for packing the buying items.

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well
as for the terrestrial and marine creature
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because
its production and processing create
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a lot of
pollutants in the
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air
and water.
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,
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government
and society should create the awareness among the population to
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use
of a cloth
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bag
and renewable
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bags
for their shopping.
27Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
405 words
6.5
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