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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. v. 3
In recent decades, plastic pollution has increasing exponentially. Some people believe that plastic bags make a major contribution in increasing land and water pollution and these should be banned. In my opinion, plastics are affecting our environment badly and should be completely banned if we want to protect our planet. To begin with, plastics are the main reason of causing land pollution. This is because the harmful chemicals in plastic composition gets mixed up in the soil and affects its fertility. Also, since plastics are not recyclable, it does not get treated with other garbage, therefore this adds up to the ever increasing pollution of land. For example, in India, in 2017, it was found that plastic is consumed 80% in the form of shopping bags. Hence, plastic shopping bags should be banned and replaced by paper or cloth bags. Moreover, water bodies are getting affected extremely by the extensive use of plastics. In fact, plastic bags and bottles that does not get treated with garbage, floats down into the sea and creates a cluster of untreated plastic waste. This in turn pollutes the water in the sea which is the main drinking source for various animals. In a recent survey, it was found that around 60% of sea waste comprises of plastic polythenes. Therefore, banning plastic shopping bags will reduce the pollution enormously. In conclusion, plastic shopping bags affect the soil and water drastically. In order to deal with this deterioating situation, an action is required. I believe that the government should prohibit the use of bags made out of plastics since they are not recyclable and is a major contributor of land and water pollution.
In recent decades,
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plastic
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has increasing
exponentially
.
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people
believe that
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plastic
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bags
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make
a major contribution in increasing
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land
and
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water
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pollution
and these should
be banned
. In my opinion,
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plastics
are affecting our environment
badly
and should be completely banned if we want to protect our planet.

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begin
with,
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plastics
are the main reason of causing
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land
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pollution
. This is
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because
the harmful chemicals in
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plastic
composition
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gets
mixed up in the soil and affects its fertility.
Also
, since
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plastics
are not recyclable, it does not
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get
treated with other garbage,
therefore
this
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adds
up to the
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ever increasing
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pollution
of
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land
.
For example
, in India, in 2017, it
was found
that
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plastic
is consumed
80% in the form of
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shopping
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bags
.
Hence
,
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
should
be banned
and replaced by paper or cloth bags.

Moreover
,
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water
bodies are getting
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affected
extremely
by the extensive
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use
of
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plastics
. In fact,
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plastic
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bags
and bottles that does not
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get
treated with garbage, floats down into the sea and creates a cluster of untreated
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plastic
waste. This in turn pollutes the
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water
in the sea which is the main drinking source for various animals. In a recent survey, it
was found
that around 60% of sea waste
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comprises of
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plastic
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polythenes
.
Therefore
, banning
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
will
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reduce
the
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pollution
enormously
.

In conclusion
,
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
affect the soil and
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water
drastically
. In order to deal with this
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deterioating
situation, an action
is required
. I believe that the
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government
should prohibit the
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use
of
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bags
made out of
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plastics
since they are not recyclable and is a major contributor of
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land
and
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water
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pollution
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
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