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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v.1

Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 1
It’s widely believed in today’s materialistic world that the latest innovative fashion trends hold great significance. On the other hand, such trends are believed to be set only in the pursuit of profits for large designer companies. It seems that in recent times, people are now changing their minds in regards to wearing clothes for comfort and as a personal choice. Personally, I agree that we should pay more attention to individuality and comfort in the way we dress. Firstly, fashion designs exist as a form of creative artistic expression of the designer. Although this may be true, undoubtedly such designs take away individuality once a trend is set in place. By this, I mean that there is nothing unique about wearing what everybody else does. More specifically, if everyone sports the latest colour and design in summer skirts, do we not look the same? Secondly, It is possible that fashion trends can look extremely stylish to the general public. However, it can be argued that the main purpose of wearing clothes is for more functional reasons. This is primarily due to the fact that clothes were traditionally worn to protect people from climatic conditions. For instance, clothes are still worn basically to keep people warm and dry in winter and cool in summer. Finally, fashion certainly gives us a sense of confidence and pride in our appearance. While this is certainly a good point, it also means that following such changeable trends proves to be expensive. For example, purchasing every latest season’s fashion item will, of course, blow the budget of many young people. In conclusion, there are various arguments to support the dismissal of fashion trends, consisting of not conforming, comfort and price, which I strongly agree with.
It’s
widely
believed in
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today
’s materialistic world that the latest innovative
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fashion
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trends
hold great significance.
On the other hand
, such
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trends
are believed
to
be set
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only
in the pursuit of profits for large designer
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companies
. It seems that in recent times,
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people
are
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now
changing their minds
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
wearing
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clothes
for comfort and as a personal choice.
Personally
, I
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agree
that we should pay more attention to individuality and comfort in the way we dress.

Firstly
,
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fashion
designs exist as a form of creative artistic expression of the designer. Although this may be true,
undoubtedly
such designs take away individuality once a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trend
is set
in place. By this, I mean that there is nothing unique about wearing what everybody else does. More
specifically
, if everyone sports the latest
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
and design in summer skirts, do we not look the same?

Secondly
, It is possible that
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fashion
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trends
can look
extremely
stylish to the
Consider using "public".
general public
.
However
, it can
be argued
that the main purpose of wearing
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clothes
is for more functional reasons. This is
primarily
due to the fact that
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clothes
were
traditionally
worn to protect
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people
from climatic conditions.
For instance
,
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clothes
are
still
worn
basically
to
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keep
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people
warm and dry in winter and cool in summer.

Finally
,
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fashion
certainly
gives us a sense of confidence and pride in our appearance. While this is
certainly
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
point, it
also
means that following such changeable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trends
proves to be expensive.
For example
, purchasing every latest season’s
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fashion
item will,
of course
, blow the budget of
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many
young
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people
.

In conclusion
, there are various arguments to support the dismissal of
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fashion
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trends
, consisting of not conforming, comfort and price, which I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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