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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. do you agree or disagree? v.8

Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. v. 8
Education is important in all parts of the world and being an undergraduate is even more treasured in the world. As a tradition, half of the children from the world population are getting their primary education from the colleges as a necessity. But the Higher education qualification will accept only for some set of students based on their performance as well as the financial status. In my opinion, the above state must be true as the government will offer scholarships for high performing students from different universities based in local and overseas both. But for other students who have not accomplished the required passing mark for the university entrance have to look at the private institutes which is more costly. Firstly, it must be admitted, the cost for the private universities are dramatically increasing. Sometimes the total amount is not bearable for many students. Because of that they decide to quit it from the college level. By considering this fact, some of the banks have introduced educational loans for students to continue their primary education to higher level education which is not going to be an obstacle anymore for students who are not be able to pay the university fee. On the other hand, There are some set of students who are financially stable but not with sufficient education qualifications which are must to get into the university. According to the university laws, to enrol for a particular degree or a programme the student should get the expected mark from the entry level examination. It does not depend on how rich you are. You still have to be qualified. As to conclude, Getting into a university does not rely on wealth and poverty, but it all matters with the qualifications. Therefore each and everyone who wishes to go to universities find difficulties to get the admission.
Education
is
important
in all parts of the world and being an undergraduate is even more treasured in the world. As a tradition, half of the children from the world population are getting their primary
education
from the colleges as a necessity.
But
the Higher
education
qualification will accept
only
for
some
set of
students
based on their performance
as well
as the financial status. In my opinion, the above state
must
be true as the
government
will offer scholarships for high performing
students
from
different
universities
based in local and overseas both.
But
for other
students
who
have not accomplished the required passing mark for the
university
entrance
have to
look at the private institutes which is more costly.

Firstly
, it
must
be admitted
, the cost for the private
universities
are
dramatically
increasing.
Sometimes
the total amount is not bearable for
many
students
.
Because
of that they decide to quit it from the college level. By considering this fact,
some of the
banks have introduced educational loans for
students
to continue their primary
education
to higher level
education
which is not going to be an obstacle anymore for
students
who
are not
be
able to pay the
university
fee.

On the other hand
, There are
some
set of
students
who
are
financially
stable
but
not with sufficient
education
qualifications which are
must
to
get
into the
university
. According to the
university
laws, to enrol for a particular degree or a
programme
the
student
should
get
the
expected
mark from the entry level examination. It does not depend on how rich you are. You
still
have to
be qualified
.

As
to conclude
, Getting into a
university
does not rely on wealth and poverty,
but
it all matters with the qualifications.
Therefore
each and
everyone
who
wishes to go to
universities
find difficulties to
get
the admission.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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