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People’s lives are now surrounded by advertisement. This affects what people consider important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

People’s lives are now surrounded by advertisement. This affects what people consider important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. v. 3
Nowadays, advertisement played a vital role in people's life. While some population argued that it has a disadvantage support on people's life. In my opinion, I completely agree with this and this essay will discuss the reasons. Firstly, advertisement modified the mind of people with a lot of skims which progress a negative impact on the heart of people. In other words, people all time wants to buy something in a short amount of money, but when they saw the lot of offers on the advertisement they became interested and spend a lot of money from their job salaries. By the result of that, they cannot service the other issues of families as well as own problems which are popular issues these days. For example, my younger brother spends his salary for buying a mobile phone which gives him another phone free, but when he was suffering on health disease he cannot go to doctor only for money problems. To summarize, people should not focus on advertisement for a well calculated happier life. Secondly, there is a lot of fake advertisement for cheat with people on the internet which are destroying the belief of people in advertising. In short, fake advertisement on the social sites offering some fake skims and people are attracting on these as well as spending a lot of money. Then the skimmers collect the money and close the advertisement which they created on the internet. For instance, my cousin Faruk recently showed me an offer which was studying in Canada for free as well as without IELTS, I advised him that it is a fake offer, although, interestingly, while he spends around one thousand dollars on the site of the skimmer, the website got closed. To repeat in short, some fake advertisement decreasing the trust of people in advertising which is another negative reason. To conclude, advertisement has some benefit issues. Although, I personally completely agree that the advertisement has a negative impact on the life of the population.
Nowadays,
advertisement
played a vital role in
people
's life.
While
some
population argued that it has a disadvantage support on
people
's life. In my opinion, I completely
agree
with this and this essay will discuss the reasons.

Firstly
,
advertisement
modified the mind of
people
with a
lot
of skims which progress a
negative
impact on the heart of
people
.
In other words
,
people
all time wants to
buy
something in a short amount of
money
,
but
when they
saw
the
lot
of offers on the
advertisement
they became interested and spend a
lot
of
money
from their job salaries. By the result of that, they cannot service the other issues of families as
well
as
own
problems which are popular issues these days.
For example
, my younger brother spends his salary for buying a mobile phone which gives him another phone free,
but
when he was suffering on health disease he cannot go to doctor
only
for
money
problems.
To summarize
,
people
should not focus on
advertisement
for a
well
calculated happier life.

Secondly
, there is a
lot
of
fake
advertisement
for cheat with
people
on the internet which are destroying the belief of
people
in advertising. In short,
fake
advertisement
on the social sites offering
some
fake
skims and
people
are attracting on these as
well
as spending a
lot
of
money
. Then the skimmers collect the
money
and close the
advertisement
which they created on the internet.
For instance
, my cousin
Faruk
recently
showed
me an offer which was studying in Canada for free as
well
as without IELTS, I advised him that it is a
fake
offer, although,
interestingly
, while he spends around one thousand dollars on the site of the skimmer, the website
got
closed. To repeat in short,
some
fake
advertisement
decreasing the trust of
people
in advertising which is another
negative
reason.

To conclude
,
advertisement
has
some
benefit issues.
Although
, I
personally
completely
agree
that the
advertisement
has a
negative
impact on the life of the population.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay People’s lives are now surrounded by advertisement. This affects what people consider important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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