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People will never be willing to make the dramatic lifestyle changes needed to control climate change. For this reason, government must force people to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

People will never be willing to make the dramatic lifestyle changes needed to control climate change. For this reason, government must force people to do so. v. 1
No huge alters and modifications in the lifestyle of people will not be done by individuals to deal with major problems of humidity change. According to this, it is a "must" thing for the state to make them to do this. I completely agree with that obligation. First reason for that, I agree is that people cannot make assumptions to help the environment. For example, as now is being quarantined in my rustic there is such a law that's going out or driving the car are prohibited in my home. The reason for that is not giving the virus to develop and also halting humidity changes in my rustic. People do not follow that rule of their own, only if ministry is included by fining the violations. The second reason is that union must organize all types of litter bins on the roads of the city such as for metals, plastics, papers and so on, which can trigger pollution if do not so. For example, in my home there are warnings for people about not to litter or walk on the grass if there is such situations they will be fined, but it is especially in well known districts of my city. I think it should be made all over the province to protect the world from humidity change. In conclusion, I think the best way to stop temperature change is forcing and fining people by authority if they do not follow the rules of the city.
No huge alters and modifications in the lifestyle of
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people
will not
be done
by individuals to deal with major problems of humidity
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change
. According to this, it is a
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must
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thing for the state to
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make
them to do this. I completely
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agree
with that obligation.

First
reason for that, I
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agree
is that
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people
cannot
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make
assumptions to
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help
the environment.
For example
, as
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now
is
being quarantined
in my rustic there is such a law that's going out or driving the car
are prohibited
in my home. The reason for
that is
not giving the virus to develop and
also
halting humidity
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changes
in my rustic.
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People
do not follow that
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rule
of their
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own
,
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only
if ministry
is included
by fining the violations.

The second reason is that union
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must
organize all types of litter bins on the roads of the city such as for metals, plastics, papers and
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so
on, which can trigger pollution if do not
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so
.
For example
, in my home there are warnings for
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people
about not to litter or walk on the grass if
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there is such situations
they will
be fined
,
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but
it is
especially
in well known districts of my city. I
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think
it should
be made
all over the province to protect the world from humidity
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change
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
the best way to
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stop
temperature
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change
is forcing and fining
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people
by authority if they do not follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of the city.
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IELTS essay People will never be willing to make the dramatic lifestyle changes needed to control climate change. For this reason, government must force people to do so. v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
247 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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