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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.4

There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? v. 4
In recent years, the number of students enrolling in the universities is on the rise. Some people believe that this growth has a positive effect on the society while others think that it may reduce the quality of education in the universities. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a huge number of students at university. On one hand, having a large number of students will be advantageous in various ways. If there are more students, universities can improve financially. When universities have adequate funds, they can be invested in research and development activities. Most of the universities in the United States generate funds through fees, and invest them on computer research Students with different cultures and backgrounds can be welcomed when there is a high intake of students. Due to the diversity, students can learn different cultures and they can also improve their communication. On the other hand, universities which admit number of students might face difficulties in providing quality education. Faculty to student ratio will be very less in such universities, making it hard for students to work on research projects which need continuous mentoring from the professors of the university. If there is no research in university, there will be no innovation and the reputation of university eventually comes down. In conclusion, although there are advantages and disadvantages, universities should enrol optimum number of students which bring a balance by maintaining the quality of education and the level of the education in the community.
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in the
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. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a huge
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number
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at university.

On one hand, having a large
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number
of
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students
will be advantageous in various ways. If there are more
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,
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can
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improve
financially
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have adequate funds, they can
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research
and development activities. Most of the
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universities
in the United States generate funds through fees, and invest them on computer
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research
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with
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which admit
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might face difficulties in providing quality
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. Faculty to
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ratio will be
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, making it
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to work on
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projects which need continuous mentoring from the professors of the
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university
. If there is no
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research
in
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university
, there will be no innovation and the reputation of
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eventually
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comes
down.

In conclusion
, although there are advantages and disadvantages,
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should enrol optimum
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number
of
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students
which bring a balance by maintaining the quality of
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education
and the level of the
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education
in the community.
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IELTS essay There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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