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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v.8

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 8
The world is shaped by the ideas of few people who played the role of pioneer in the society. Their ideas contributed greatly to the enhancement of social, economic and political conditions across the globe. It is agreed that such people who contribute to the world with their thoughts are valuable legends of the society. This apparent when we see how such ideas help in social reforms and technological innovations. The society is continuously improving and aligning to the needs of new generations. Sometimes, this requires a social reformation idea of some great people who have an extraordinary vision for the future of the society and nations. Leaders like Margret Thatcher, Nelson Mandela and Abraham Lincoln had such an extraordinary vision to change the society. For example, the idea of non-violence agitation of a single person helped India to achieve independence in 1947. Even though the real power of such ideas are manifested when the mass follow it, it is the original thoughts that bring in the change in society. Technological innovations often changed the way we live in this world by bringing in more efficiency and comfort. Such innovations are great ideas of fewer people and later copied by the rest of the world. For instance, Wright brothers, who invented the first airplane; Thomas Edison, who invented the electricity, have moved the world to the next level. The whole humanity is benefited from such people's idea and their contributions to the society are exponential compared to those who use these ideas. In conclusion, it is a known fact that an idea can change the world, and the people who innovate such an idea are invaluable to the society. Nevertheless, the people who copy their ideas and concepts indeed help the society to realise their benefits and thus contribute to the society as well.
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. Their
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contributed
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to the enhancement of social, economic and political conditions across the globe. It is
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that such
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people
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who
contribute to the
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world
with their thoughts are valuable legends of the
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society
. This apparent when we
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see
how such
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ideas
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help
in social reforms and technological innovations.

The
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society
is
continuously
improving and aligning to the needs of new generations.
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Sometimes
, this requires a social reformation
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idea
of
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some
great
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people
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who
have an extraordinary vision for the future of the
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society
and nations. Leaders like Margret Thatcher, Nelson Mandela and Abraham Lincoln had such an extraordinary vision to
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change
the
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society
.
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, the
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idea
of non-violence agitation of a single person
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helped
India to achieve independence in 1947.
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the real power of such
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ideas
are manifested
when the mass follow it, it is the original thoughts that bring in the
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change
in society.

Technological innovations
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often
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changed
the way we
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live
in this
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world
by bringing in more efficiency and comfort. Such innovations are great
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ideas
of fewer
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people
and later copied by the rest of the
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world
.
For instance
, Wright brothers,
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who
invented the
first
airplane; Thomas Edison,
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who
invented the electricity, have
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moved
the
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world
to the
next
level. The whole humanity
is benefited
from such
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people
's
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idea
and their contributions to the
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society
are exponential compared to those
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who
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use
these
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ideas
.

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, it is a known fact that an
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idea
can
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change
the
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world
, and the
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people
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who
innovate such an
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idea
are invaluable to the
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society
.
Nevertheless
, the
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people
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who
copy their
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ideas
and concepts
indeed
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help
the
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society
to
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realise
their benefits and
thus
contribute to the
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society
as well
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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