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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v.3

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 3
I certainly agree that people who come up with new ideas; in other words those who 'invent' or 'discover' things are terribly important to society as a whole. However, I also think there is a role in society for good imitators. No one would deny that key individuals must be thanked for providing us with certain facilities that we use every day. Where, would we be, for example, without basic items such as the washing machine, the television and, more recently, the computer? These items are now used so regularly that we tend to take them for granted. Throughout the history, the inventors and scientist have invented things those have become out part of life and those inventions have up surged the human civilisation. There are many heavenly scientists whose single theory has changed the whole world. Those inventors are the leader of the whole mankind. In fact, the society we live in today has become increasingly consumer-oriented, and while it may be possible to constantly update and improve consumer goods, not everyone where I live can afford the prices of these innovations. Furthermore, not everyone lives in an area that has accessibility to the latest models on the market. For this reason, there is a value to be placed on being able to provide good copies of expensive items. Again many scientists have given many theory and others have implemented it. So this implementation has a great value too. There are lots of evidence that the main invention was very little useful while the developer later made it possible to alter the main device for a better use. So we should not and can’t deny the hard work done by those who copy the idea and develop it for better output. Having said that, certain innovations have a more serious impact on our lives than consumer goods and cannot easily be replicated. Vital medicines like penicillin and vaccines against dangerous diseases also exist because people made continual efforts to develop them. Scientific ideas such as these enable us to live longer and escape illness.
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who
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come
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ideas
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terribly
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important
to society as a whole.
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, I
also
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think
there is a role in society for
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good
imitators.

No one would deny that key individuals
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must
be thanked
for providing us with certain facilities that we
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use
every day. Where, would we be,
for example
, without basic items such as the washing machine, the television and, more recently, the computer? These items are
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now
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used
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so
regularly
that we tend to take them for granted. Throughout the history, the inventors and scientist have invented things those have become out part of life and those inventions have up surged the human
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civilisation
. There are
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many
heavenly scientists whose single theory has
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changed
the whole world. Those inventors are the leader of the whole mankind.

In fact, the society we
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live
in
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today
has become
increasingly
consumer-oriented, and while it may be possible to
constantly
update and
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improve
consumer
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goods
, not everyone where I
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live
can afford the prices of these innovations.
Furthermore
, not everyone
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lives
in an area that has accessibility to the latest models on the market.
For this reason
, there is a value to
be placed
on being able to provide
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good
copies of expensive items. Again
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many
scientists have
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given
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many theory
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and others
have implemented it.
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So
this implementation has a great value too. There are lots of evidence that the main invention was
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very
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little
useful while the developer later made it possible to alter the main device for a better
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use
.
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So
we should not and can’t deny the
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hard
work done by those who copy the
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idea
and develop it for better output.

Having said that, certain innovations have a more serious impact on our
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lives
than consumer
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goods
and cannot
easily
be replicated
. Vital medicines like penicillin and vaccines against
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dangerous
diseases
also
exist
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because
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people
made continual efforts to develop them. Scientific
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ideas
such as these enable us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
longer and escape illness.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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