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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v.4

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 4
It is believed that people who have genuine ideas bring more benefits to the communities rather than those who duplicate the thought of other people. To a certain extent, I would agree that having pure and original ideas have a higher value than to copy the works of other people. But from the copying activities, other people have developed the work to become more effective and useful. On the one hand, it is true that the public should respect those who have genuine and original ideas. These people have sacrificed and spent a lot of their time for thinking, studying and doing some research, in order to get new ideas or inventions. And many of the results bring a lot of benefits for the human kind. One of the examples would be Thomas Alva Edison, who had spent most of his time in experimenting so many things. He had tried for almost 1000 times before he invented the bulb light. Therefore, it is believed that people should appreciate their hard work, the eagerness and the sacrifice these people had been through, in order to get the innovative ideas. On the other hand, there are groups of people who copy ideas from other people. Although some people might disrespect this kind of act, but certain people have developed the ideas into something greater than the original ones. For example, it is undeniable that during the 1950's, Japanese car producers were copying the designs of the American and Europeans car manufacturers. But instead of copying the ideas, the Japanese conducted some extensive development programs. As a result, the Japanese could make a more efficient car than the European and American, such as the Toyota Prius which used the hybrid technology. In conclusion, I would agree that some innovative and creative thinkers and inverters should be fully appreciated for their original concepts, as they bring so many positive aspects to the society. But, sometimes the copying activities could not be judged as a negative thing since there are other people who could copy the ideas and then developed it well.
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agree
that having pure and
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original
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ideas
have a higher value than to copy the works of
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other
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people
.
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from the
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copying
activities,
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people
have developed the work to become more effective and useful.

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who
have genuine and
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original
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ideas
. These
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people
have sacrificed and spent
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a lot of
their time for thinking, studying and doing
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some
research, in order to
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get
new
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ideas
or inventions. And
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of the results bring
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a lot of
benefits for the human kind. One of the examples would be Thomas Alva Edison,
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who
had spent most of his time in experimenting
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so
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many
things. He had tried for almost 1000 times
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before
he invented the bulb light.
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is believed
that
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people
should appreciate their
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hard
work, the eagerness and the sacrifice these
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people
had been through, in order to
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get
the innovative
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ideas
.

On the
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hand, there are groups of
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people
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who
copy
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ideas
from
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other
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people
. Although
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some
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people
might disrespect this kind of act,
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but
certain
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people
have developed the
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ideas
into something greater than the
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original
ones.
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, it is undeniable that during the
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, Japanese car producers were
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copying
the designs of the American and Europeans car manufacturers.
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instead
of
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copying
the
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ideas
, the Japanese conducted
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some
extensive development programs.
As a result
, the Japanese could
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make
a more efficient car than the European and American, such as the Toyota Prius which
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used
the hybrid technology.

In conclusion
, I would
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agree
that
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some
innovative and creative thinkers and inverters should be
fully
appreciated for their
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original
concepts, as they bring
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so
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many
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positive
aspects to the society.
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,
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sometimes
the
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copying
activities could not
be judged
as a
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negative
thing since there are
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other
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people
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who
could copy the
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ideas
and then developed it well.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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