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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v.7

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 7
"An idea can change your life", this famous advertisement tagline points towards a debatable topic; whether an original idea is more important to the society or a copy of the idea. In the world, if the product has a monopoly then it might be difficult for mass to enjoy the advantages of it. In such cases, a competition could help to keep the prices grounded. For example, Apple had launched an iPad to enjoy music which was very expensive due to its unique features. However, when the other companies launched similar products and that could be one of the reasons for the reduction of the pad prices. The original is always considered as a masterpiece and the copied versions are called extensions of it. That is why ‘Taj Mahal’ is one of the Seven Wonders of the World and ‘Bibi Ka Makbara’ which is a copy of it is known by local people only. Nevertheless, few ideas have to be original only and should not be experimented extensively for the safety of the planet. For instance, when scientists found nuclear power, they might have thought about its positive sides like cheaper energy. However, during the copy of this idea, some destructive mindset people might have changed it completely and developed nuclear weapons. Another example could be a sword. Our ancestors invented it to kill animals and feed the families. Unfortunately, over a period of time, its real use was forgotten and humans started using it to kill other humans in the wars. I believe the original idea whose intention is to make human life better should not be copied by those people whose intention is just to make money even if it is in the price of human life.
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idea
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important
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.

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help
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, Apple had launched an iPad to enjoy music which was
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very
expensive due to its unique features.
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companies
launched similar products and that could be one of the reasons for the reduction of the pad prices.

The
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is always considered as a masterpiece and the copied versions
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extensions of it.
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positive
sides like cheaper energy.
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,
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some
destructive mindset
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people
might have
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changed
it completely and developed nuclear weapons. Another example could be a sword. Our ancestors invented it to kill animals and feed the families. Unfortunately, over a period of time, its real
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use
was forgotten
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humans
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started
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humans
in the wars.

I believe the
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original
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idea
whose intention is to
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make
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human
life better should not
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people
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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