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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v.6

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 6
Society respects both types of people because inventing itself does not add value to the mankind but implementing and improvising on original ideas are equally important. At the same time, innovators should be credited as they are the ones that triggered minds of others. It is good to copy ideas of others if someone adding value to original thought. For example, Right brothers invented flying machines couple of generations ago. Several engineers, scientists and researchers improved this idea and made flying safer and accessible to wide range of people. Had this not happened, today we had to travel for months to reach from one corner of the globe to other. If we consider examples of healthcare, lots of improvements have been done over the past ages to original ideas to save lives of people effectively and efficiently. We can find this pattern not only in these industries but in almost all luxuries and comforts we have today. Original ideas laid the foundation for modern innovations of today. So, society respects both categories of people. On the contrary, original ideas should be credited because without their ideas things would not have been how they are today. For instance, telecommunications industry developed rapidly in last decade. Without the invention of smartphones today, communications would have been dull and difficult. In this ever improving world, new ideas will be developed by organisations and individuals and well recognised by the society. There have been awards and prizes like Nobel Prize that are globally recognised and helped to reach ideas masses and impact day-to-day lives of people throughout our world. To summarise, societies have been recognising both original innovators and the ones who improved original ideas. Without continued efforts of both, lifestyle stagnates.
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people
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because
inventing itself does not
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add
value to the mankind
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but
implementing and improvising on
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original
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ideas
are
equally
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important
. At the same time, innovators should
be credited
as they are the
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ones
that triggered minds of others.

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good
to copy
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ideas
of others if someone adding value to
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original
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thought
.
For example
, Right brothers invented flying machines
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couple of
generations ago. Several engineers, scientists and researchers
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improved
this
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idea
and made flying safer and accessible to wide range of
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people
. Had this not happened,
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today
we had to travel for months to reach from one corner of the globe to other. If we consider examples of healthcare, lots of improvements have
been done
over the past ages to
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original
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ideas
to save
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of
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people
effectively
and
efficiently
. We can find this pattern not
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only
in these industries
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but
in almost all luxuries and comforts we have
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today
.
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Original
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ideas
laid the foundation for modern innovations of
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today
.
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,
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society
respects both categories of
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people
.

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,
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original
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ideas
should
be credited
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because
without their
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ideas
things would not have been how they are
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today
.
For instance
, telecommunications industry developed
rapidly
in last decade. Without the invention of smartphones
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today
, communications would have been dull and difficult. In this ever improving world, new
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ideas
will
be developed
by
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organisations
and individuals and well
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recognised
by the
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society
. There have been awards and prizes like Nobel Prize that are globally
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recognised
and
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helped
to reach
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ideas
masses and impact day-to-day
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lives
of
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people
throughout our world.

To
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summarise
,
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societies
have been
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recognising
both
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original
innovators and the
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ones
who
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improved
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original
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ideas
. Without continued efforts of both, lifestyle stagnates.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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