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write about the following topic: Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion? Write at least 250 wor v.2

: Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Write at least 250 wor v. 2
Leaning is a never ending process and is not solely restricted to younger people. However, it is an undeniable factor that most of our learning developed at the early age. There is one group of people assert that children should learn basic manners from their parents, whereas other group of people if of the view that school is the appropriate place to learn this. In my point of view both places hold equal importance, however, school is the place where children spend most of their time so major responsibility lies at their end. Let’s discuss both school of thoughts in detail before reaching to a final verdict. To begin one, School is the place where children capabilities are rightly judged. Their capacity of observing and adopting good manner are identified in true manner since, they spend quite good amount of their day at school. Teachers and mentors are highly responsible to make kids learn good manners. For example, kids learn how to interact with other people, their school mates. Teachers should develop basic manners in children like sharing their meals, their accessories with other kids. School is not the place for academic learning but also a place where children basic grooming is done. On the flip side, the importance of parent’s contribution towards developing good manners in their child cannot be overlooked. Being parents, they are as accountable as teachers are for this core responsibility. To make a child a responsible, mature and groomed, parents and teachers should be closely coordinating. In order to identify lacking and development areas, parents should be in close interaction with teachers. It is very vital to keep a close eye on kid’s development and basic grooming as if it is neglected at early age it will have severe consequences in future. To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, it is the vital and mutual responsibility of teachers and parents for well-being of their children. Grooming in rightful manner and good upbringing will give a society a good human being in future.
Leaning is a never ending process and is not
solely
restricted to younger
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people
.
However
, it is an undeniable factor that most of our learning developed at the early age. There is one group of
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people
assert that
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children
should
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learn
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basic
manners from their
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parents
, whereas other group of
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people
if of the view that
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school
is the appropriate
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place
to
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learn
this. In my point of view both
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places
hold equal importance,
however
,
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school
is the
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place
where
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children
spend most of their time
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so
major responsibility lies at their
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end
.
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Let
’s discuss both
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school
of thoughts in detail
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before
reaching to a final verdict.

To
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begin
one,
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School
is the
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place
where
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children
capabilities are
rightly
judged. Their capacity of observing and adopting
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good
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manner
are identified
in true
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manner
since, they spend quite
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good
amount of their day at
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school
.
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and mentors are
highly
responsible to
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make
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kids
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learn
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good
manners.
For example
,
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kids
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learn
how to interact with other
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people
, their
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school
mates.
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Teachers
should develop
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basic
manners in
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children
like sharing their meals, their accessories with other
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kids
.
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School
is not the
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place
for academic learning
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but
also
a
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place
where
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children
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basic
grooming
is done
.

On the flip side, the importance of
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parent’s
contribution towards developing
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good
manners in their child cannot
be overlooked
. Being
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parents
, they are as accountable as
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teachers
are for this core responsibility. To
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make
a child a responsible, mature and groomed,
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parents
and
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teachers
should be
closely
coordinating. In order to identify lacking and development areas,
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parents
should be in close interaction with
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teachers
. It is
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very
vital to
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keep
a close eye on
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kid’s
development and
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basic
grooming as if it
is neglected
at early age it will have severe consequences
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in future
.

To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, it is the vital and mutual responsibility of
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teachers
and
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parents
for well-being of their
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children
. Grooming in rightful
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manner
and
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good
upbringing will give a society a
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good
human being
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay : Some people think that parent should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Write at least 250 wor v. 2

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4 paragraphs
335 words
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