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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individually and on society? v.3

According to Dalai Lama, the Buddhist monk famous all over the world, sleep is the best meditation. However, a lot of people just cannot seem to get enough sleep. This essay will discuss the main problems of not getting enough sleep and will also suggest solutions which can be taken to tackle this situation. To begin with, people who work in a fast-paced environment have a hectic schedule. They have various tasks that need to be completed in a stipulated amount of time, and this puts them under tremendous pressure. The major side effect / drawback of sleep deprivation is the lack of concentration. In other words, the person feels less motivated and focussed the following day and this further affects his performance at work. Secondly, the lack of sleep also causes numerous health ailments such as cardiac trouble, diabetes and obesity. In addition, sleep deprived people lack the energy to work out and thus lead a sedentary lifestyle. For instance, according to a recent survey by the ‘WHO’ almost thirty per cent of the people are prone to several health problems due to the lack of proper rest. However, there are ways to tackle such problems. Firstly, one should make it a habit to exercise and do meditation daily. This is to say, people with sleep deprivation should ensure that they dedicate at least some time of their day for these activities. This will not only help them to sleep easily but also increase their concentration levels. Apart from that, substances that contain caffeine, nicotine, and alcohol should be avoided as it disrupts the regular sleeping pattern. For example, numerous studies have shown that people tend to stay awake if they smoke or consume too much caffeine. Lastly, one should get in touch with the doctor if he/she is unable to get proper sleep before the health further deteriorates. To conclude, lack of sleep disrupts the brain’s ability to think properly and causes several health issues; however, reducing the intake of substances that cause sleep deprivation and increasing meditation can help an individual sleep peacefully.
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-paced environment have a hectic schedule. They have various tasks that need to
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deprivation is the
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also
causes numerous
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ailments such as cardiac trouble, diabetes and obesity.
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deprived
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people
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the energy to work out and
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, according to a recent survey by the ‘WHO’ almost thirty per cent of the
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people
are prone to several
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problems due to the
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it a habit to exercise and do meditation daily. This is to say,
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people
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deprivation should ensure that they dedicate at least
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time of their day for these activities. This will not
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increase their concentration levels. Apart from that, substances that contain caffeine, nicotine, and alcohol should
be avoided
as it disrupts the regular sleeping pattern.
For example
, numerous studies have shown that
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people
tend to stay awake if they smoke or consume too much caffeine.
Lastly
, one should
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in touch with the doctor if he/she is unable to
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disrupts the brain’s ability to
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think
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and causes several
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health
issues;
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, reducing the intake of substances that cause
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sleep
deprivation and increasing meditation can
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help
an individual
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sleep
peacefully
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulty getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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