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People should work a fixed number or hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. v.2

People should work a fixed number or hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. v. 2
Employees should have a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask their employees to work mote than that. Concerned to this, I do both agree and disagree. Agree, because company or business persons must think of their employees too, think of their employees that they worked for their family and they must have a fixed time for work so that they can manage their time. However, I disagree also because as a worker must follow on what the company' s policy, there will be a time that you need to have overtime to finish your work. I do agree that people should have a fixed time for work, like what I stated on the first part, all employees or people work for their family, like me. For example, if we dont have fixed time for work, we cant manage our time wisely. If we have fixed time or hours for work we can designate and know what are the things that we must do. Although I agree, I do disagree also to the point that employers should not ask for more time. In my opinion, for example if there is a problem and we did not finish our paper works in time, we need to have or to go overtime to finish all of those things, even if it was ask by our manager or not. We need to finish our worked first for us to stay and have a good impressions to others. In conclusion, it is still a case to case basis. I do agree that workers should have fixed hours for work, and still employers can ask more time if they can compensate the overtime. I do disagree also because if you can still work for more hours, you can have it as long as you want and it is paid. Therefore if your company already did not take or do their part as an employer, we have organization that can give us help in case of having problems to our work.
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Employees
should have a
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fixed
number of
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hours
per week, and
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employers
should not
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ask
their
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employees
to
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work
mote than that. Concerned to this, I do both
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agree
and
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disagree
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,
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because
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company
or business persons
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must
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think
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employees
too,
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think
of their
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employees
that they worked for their
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family and
they
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must
have a
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fixed
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time
for
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work
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so
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time
.
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, I
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disagree
also
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because
as a worker
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must
follow on what the
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company&
#039; s policy, there will be a
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time
that you need to have overtime to
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finish
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I do
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agree
that
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people
should have a
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fixed
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time
for
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work
, like what I stated on the
first
part, all
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employees
or
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people
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work
for their family, like me.
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, if we
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dont
have
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fixed
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time
for
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work
, we
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cant
manage our
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time
wisely
. If we have
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fixed
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time
or
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hours
for
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work
we can designate and know what are the things that we
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must
do. Although I
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agree
, I do
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disagree
also
to the point that
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employers
should not
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ask
for more
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time
. In my opinion,
for example
if there is a
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problem and
we did not
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finish
our paper works in
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time
, we need to have or to go overtime to
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finish
all of those things, even if it was
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ask
by our manager or not. We need to
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finish
our worked
first
for us to stay and have a
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good
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impressions
to others.

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, it is
still
a case to case basis. I do
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agree
that workers should have
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fixed
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hours
for
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work
, and
still
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employers
can
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ask
more
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time
if they can compensate the overtime. I do
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disagree
also
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because
if you can
still
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work
for more
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hours
, you can have it as long as you want and it
is paid
.
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Therefore
if your
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company
already did not take or do their part as an
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employer
, we have organization that can give us
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help
in case of having problems to our
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work
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay People should work a fixed number or hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
339 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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