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Economic progress is one way to measure a country’s success. What other factors do you think should be concerned when measuring the success of a country? In these factors, which one is the most important? v.8

Economic progress is one way to measure a country’s success. What other factors do you think should be concerned when measuring the success of a country? In these factors, which one is the most important? v. 8
The relative success of different countries is usually defined in economic terms. There are several other factors, apart from the economy, that could be used to assess a country, and in my opinion education is the most important of all. Standards of education, health and individual human rights should certainly be considered when measuring a country’s status. A good education system is vital for the development of any nation, with schools, colleges and universities bearing the responsibility for the quality of future generations of workers. Healthcare provision is also an indicator of the standard of living within a country, and this can be measured by looking at average life expectancy rates or availability of medical services. Finally, human rights and levels of equality could be taken into account. For example, a country in which women do not have the same opportunities as men might be considered less successful than a country with better gender equality. In my view, a country’s education system should be seen as the most important indicator of its success and level of development. This is because education has a considerable effect on the other two factors mentioned above. It affects people’s health in the sense that doctors and nurses need to be trained, and scientists need to be educated to the highest levels before they can carry out medical research. It also affects the economy in the sense that a well-educated workforce will allow a variety of companies and industries to flourish, leading to trade with other countries, and increased wealth. In conclusion, nations can be assessed and compared in a variety of ways, but I would argue that the standard of a country' s education system is the best measure of its success.
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countries
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are


several other factors, apart from the economy, that could be
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used
to assess a
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country
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in
my opinion
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education
is the most
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important
of all.

Standards of
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education
, health and individual human rights should
certainly
be considered


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when
measuring a
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country’s
status. A
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good
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education
system is vital for the
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development


of any nation, with schools, colleges and universities bearing the responsibility for the

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quality
of future generations of workers. Healthcare provision is
also
an indicator of
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the


standard of living within a
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country
, and this can
be measured
by looking at average life

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expectancy
rates or availability of medical services.
Finally
, human rights and levels of

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equality
could
be taken
into account.
For example
, a
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country
in which women do not
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have


the same opportunities as
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men
might
be considered
less successful than a
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country
with

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better
gender equality.

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country’s
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education
system should be
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seen
as the most
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important
indicator

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of
its success and level of development. This is
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because
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education
has a
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considerable


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effect
on the other two factors mentioned above. It affects
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people
’s health in the sense
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that


doctors and nurses need to
be trained
, and scientists need to
be educated
to the highest

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levels
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before
they can carry out medical research. It
also
affects the economy in the
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sense


that a well-educated workforce will
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allow
a variety of
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companies
and industries to flourish,

leading to trade with other
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countries
, and increased wealth.

In conclusion
, nations can
be assessed
and compared in a variety of ways,
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I would

argue that the standard of a
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system is the best measure of its

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success
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IELTS essay Economic progress is one way to measure a country’s success. What other factors do you think should be concerned when measuring the success of a country? In these factors, which one is the most important? v. 8

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