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People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. v. 2
Many problems people and the government should be responsible for; one of theses issues is the pollution that is caused by transportation and effects negatively on people. Some people think that they must hold the responsibility of pollution, others believe the government should be. Increasing in population and the demand on cars, lead to pollution, that’s why some people think they are causing this problem. First, humans must start using public transportations, to reduce traffic congestions and reduce fuel emissions produced from their cars. People must be motivated and encourage each other to ride bikes in the cities, while they are going to work. Moreover, people should buy eco-friendly cars such as hybrid and electric cars, that help the environment to decrease the pollution. For example, in Amsterdam there is around 600 thousand bicycles, 90% of the citizens use it and less cost and expenses for them. In my opinion, I think that we should rely more on public transportations. On the other hand, some people think that due to miss-leading and organization in their countries, the government should be held accountable. The government must decrease the tariff on environmental cars, so people are encouraged to purchase it, that aid to reduce pollution. New road infrastructure with modern public transportation must be implemented, so the expenses on the government will decrease and people won’t pay taxes for roads renovation. However, the government should make awareness campaigns, showing people what problems transportations is causing to our lives and what are the alternatives, that people need to begin to use. For example, the Ministry of Environment of Lebanon, at the beginning of 2019 launched a program to remove all taxes and tariffs on electric and hybrid vehicles, to cheer people to buy it and help their environment. From my side, we can’t put all the blame on the government, but it can assist by offering facilities, to start using alternative transportations. Finally, two views some think that people should be responsible for polluting their cities, others believe it is the government fault. In my opinion, both the government and people should take the responsibility on their own and work together to secure a healthy environment and start using another means of transports.
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problems
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people
and the
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government
should be responsible for; one of
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theses
issues is the
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pollution
that
is caused
by
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transportation
and effects
negatively
on
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people
.
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people
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think
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must
hold the responsibility of
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pollution
, others believe the
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government
should be.

Increasing in population and the demand on
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cars
, lead to
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pollution
, that’s why
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some
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people
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think
they are causing this problem.
First
, humans
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must
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start
using public
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transportations
, to
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reduce
traffic congestions and
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reduce
fuel emissions produced from their
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cars
.
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People
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must
be motivated
and encourage each
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other
to ride bikes in the cities, while they are going to work.
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,
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people
should
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buy
eco-friendly
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cars
such as hybrid and electric
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cars
, that
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help
the
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environment
to decrease the
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pollution
.
For example
, in Amsterdam there is around 600 thousand bicycles, 90% of the citizens
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use
it and less cost and expenses for them. In my opinion, I
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think
that we should rely more on public transportations.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
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think
that due to miss-leading and organization in their countries, the
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government
should
be held
accountable. The
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government
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must
decrease the tariff on environmental
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cars
,
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so
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people
are encouraged
to
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purchase
it, that aid to
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reduce
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pollution
. New road infrastructure with modern public
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transportation
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must
be implemented
,
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so
the expenses on the
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government
will decrease and
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people
won’t pay taxes for roads renovation.
However
, the
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government
should
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make
awareness campaigns, showing
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people
what problems
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transportations
is causing to our
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lives
and what are the alternatives, that
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people
need to
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begin
to
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use
.
For example
, the Ministry of
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Environment
of Lebanon, at the beginning of 2019 launched a program to remove all taxes and tariffs on electric and hybrid vehicles, to cheer
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people
to
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buy
it and
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help
their
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environment
. From my side, we can’t put all the blame on the
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government
,
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but
it can assist by offering facilities, to
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start
using alternative transportations.

Finally
, two views
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some
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think
that
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people
should be responsible for polluting their cities, others believe it is the
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government
fault. In my opinion, both the
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government
and
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people
should take the responsibility on their
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own
and work together to secure a healthy
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environment
and
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start
using another means of transports.
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IELTS essay People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
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