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People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. v. 1
University students are going to other countries for further studies is at par currently. It gives students the advantage of being exposed to the cultural diversity as well as new curriculums. However, students have to leave their home and stay in a different country where adjusting to the environment can be a bit daunting. In my opinion, students are bar better studying abroad and overcome the environment and linguistic challenges than not gaining a lifetime experience at all. Pupils studying abroad not only complete the desire curriculums, but also one can learn new courses which can help to boost their professional career. Moreover, cultural diversity also helps people to gain confidence by learning new things about different countries as they can later be comfortable in a scenario where a team consists of people from all over the world due to industry globalization. Studying in a different country requires the tendency to adapt. For instance, learning the local language of that particular country will become a skill in one's Curriculum Vitae in a professional career. It, not only, shows the skills of adaptability, but also the hidden talent of learning new things in walks of life. Another example is more of a personal experience when I was studying in America for a year. I was pushed constantly to do better while fitting into a whole new experience of classrooms, people and even food. These more than ever challenges made me a better individual in terms of an individual living in society and a professional so to speak. Overall, studying overseas can grow a person in ways that cannot be done in native country. Having said that, studying in another country has some drawbacks of its own as well. Students have to leave their home and family and move to a totally new place where they do not know any individual and it can be challenging to socialize where they are yet to learn how to adapt to such overwhelming stage of life. As instance, as an Indian student studying in the States, I had to go through this awkward phase where socializing amongst university students become a bigger challenge than my academics. It can be a bit of a struggle to make contact with people when moving from home and family. This can become the ultra-challenge to study abroad. To conclude, a significant number of university students are keen to study abroad now more than ever. Although, students have to leave their home, family and loved ones in a blink of an eye, students gain the experience of life by studying overseas. As much as I understand the sacrifices one has to made for leaving everything behind, gaining those life changing skills surpass all disadvantages overall.
University
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students
are going to other
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countries
for
further
studies is at par
currently
. It gives
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students
the advantage of
being exposed
to the cultural diversity
as well
as
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new
curriculums.
However
,
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students
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have to
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leave
their home and stay in a
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different
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country
where adjusting to the environment can be a bit daunting. In my opinion,
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students
are bar better
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studying
abroad and overcome the environment and linguistic challenges than not gaining a lifetime
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experience
at all.

Pupils
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studying
abroad not
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only
complete the desire curriculums,
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but
also
one can learn
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new
courses which can
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help
to boost their professional career.
Moreover
, cultural diversity
also
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helps
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people
to gain confidence by learning
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new
things about
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different
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countries
as they can later be comfortable in a scenario where a team consists of
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people
from all over the world due to industry globalization.
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Studying
in a
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different
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country
requires the tendency to adapt.
For instance
, learning the local language of that particular
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country
will become a
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skill
in one's Curriculum Vitae in a professional career. It, not
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only
,
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shows
the
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skills
of adaptability,
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but
also
the hidden talent of learning
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new
things in walks of
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life
. Another example is more of a personal
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experience
when I was
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studying
in America for a year. I
was pushed
constantly
to do better while fitting into a whole
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new
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experience
of classrooms,
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people
and even food. These more than ever challenges made me a better individual in terms of an individual living in society and a professional
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so
to speak.
Overall
,
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studying
overseas can grow a person in ways that cannot
be done
in native country.

Having said that,
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studying
in another
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country
has
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some
drawbacks of its
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own
as well
.
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Students
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have to
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leave
their home and family and
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move
to a
totally
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new
place where they do not know any individual and it can be challenging
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to socialize
where they are
yet
to learn how to adapt to such overwhelming stage of
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life
. As instance, as an Indian
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student
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
in the States, I had to go through this awkward phase where socializing amongst university
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students
become a bigger challenge than my academics. It can be a bit of a struggle to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
contact with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
when moving from home and family. This can become the ultra-challenge to study abroad.

To conclude
, a significant number of university
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students
are keen to study abroad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
more than ever. Although,
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students
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have to
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leave
their home, family and
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loved
ones in a blink of an eye,
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students
gain the
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experience
of
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life
by
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studying
overseas. As much as I understand the sacrifices one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
made for leaving everything behind, gaining those
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life
changing
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skills
surpass all disadvantages
overall
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay People should be responsible for the pollution problems caused by transportations, while others think the government should be held accountable. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
455 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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