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People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
One thing that people recall the most has to be receiving gifts and presents, in particular, special ones and this essay will explain why. In a number of occasions, it is socially acceptable and almost required to buy and give presents, and while this may turn into an obligation, sometimes those gifts represent something special. What lays behind the choice of a particular object or piece of clothing etc. varies from person to person and occasion to occasion, but when we choose something out of love and with having that particular friend/lover/relative in mind, the thoughtfulness of the present is what is remembered most. Among all the gifts that one person may receive during his or her life, those which have a special meaning will be remembered because they will always be associated with whoever gifted them. For example, a medicine student who is gifted his/her first stethoscope will probably remember forever who bought such a meaningful present for them. Similarly, the importance and uniqueness of the gift are other points that make it easy to be remembered: today, newlywed couples organize their honeymoons in exotic places of distant countries, and sometimes this turns out to be expensive. For this reason, the husband and wife create a fund where guests and relatives can collect money in order to gift the couple the vacation of their dreams: this often turns out to be the most appreciated and recalled wedding present among all. In conclusion, a number of factors make a gift so special that it will be remembered, but it is not just the amount of money spent that will make it remarkable: a great present is unique, thoughtful and made out of love.
One thing that
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people
recall the most
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has to
be receiving
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gifts
and
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presents
,
in particular
, special ones and this essay will
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explain
why. In a number of occasions, it is
socially
acceptable and almost required to
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buy
and give
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presents
, and while this may turn into an obligation,
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sometimes
those
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gifts
represent something special.

What lays behind the choice of a particular object or piece of clothing etc. varies from person to person and occasion to occasion,
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but
when we choose something out of
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love
and with having that particular friend/lover/relative in mind, the thoughtfulness of the
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present
is what is
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remembered
most. Among all the
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gifts
that one person may receive during
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his or her
life, those which have a special meaning will be
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remembered
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because
they will always
be associated
with whoever gifted them.
For example
, a medicine student who
is gifted
his/her
first
stethoscope will
probably
remember forever who
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bought
such a meaningful
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present
for them.

Similarly
, the importance and uniqueness of the
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gift
are other points that
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make
it easy to be
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remembered
:
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today
, newlywed couples organize their honeymoons in exotic places of distant countries, and
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sometimes
this turns out to be expensive.
For this reason
, the husband and wife create a fund where guests and relatives can collect money in order to
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gift
the couple the vacation of their dreams: this
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often
turns out to be the most appreciated and recalled wedding
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present
among all.

In conclusion
, a number of factors
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make
a
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gift
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so
special that it will be
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remembered
,
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but
it is not
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just
the amount of money spent that will
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make
it remarkable: a great
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present
is unique, thoughtful and made out of
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love
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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