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TPO 41-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

TPO 41- Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
That teachers are valuable assets of one society is an axiom. Significantly, due to the need for society to education and have a sophisticated people, it is necessary to respect the teachers. A question which is a matter, a controversial one is whether nowadays teachers have the same value than before or not. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am to a great extent to believe that teachers would not be appreciated equal the past. In what follows, I will pinpoint some outstanding reasons. To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justify the thesis is that the accessibility of people to the knowledge resources has been greater than before. Simply stated, in this technology era, no one cannot reach the given information while there are the Internet and many social media which is easily achievable for everyone in everywhere. Broadly speaking, people eliminate their need to knowledge with other assistance except for exclusive dependency on teachers. For instance, take my nephew into account, he has access to all kinds of electronic devices such as mobile phone, tablet, and laptop and I see always he is searching everything he needs on the internet of other materials in these devices. Accordingly, he claims that he can accomplish his assignments at home without any classes and teacher. Obviously, this kind of thought will be spread among other people whom it means the teachers do not have the previous site in the community. Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, the increasing number of schools and educational institutions is another point which requires meticulous attention. To put in the general words, the government itself let the private agencies to add new institutions to the community. Whereas, the more educational institutions, the more unprofessional teachers will be increased. Needless to say that, the validity of professional teachers with a high experience will be affected by this matter. As it can be testified from noteworthy meaningful statistics which states that about twenty percent of private institutions which has added newly have not the half of many state schools efficiencies in the educational improvement of students. Logically speaking, the society will be reluctant to acclaim the teachers as long as the numbers of unprofessional trainers are ascending more than before. In one word, there are many reasons which can be state for this catastrophic phenomenon in the society and I mentioned some of them. To recapitulate the reasons, not only high pace increasing of technology have hand in this matter, but also increasing the number of institutions and alongside unprofessional teachers are effective to decline the society attention towards the teachers. But the answer of some questions is like a drop in bucket and it is that how we can help to return that previous noteworthiness to the teachers?
That
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teachers
are valuable assets of one
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society
is an axiom.
Significantly
, due to the need for
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society
to education and have a sophisticated
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people
, it is necessary to respect the
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teachers
. A question which is a matter, a controversial one is whether nowadays
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teachers
have the same value
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than
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before
or not. Although it is a
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little
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hard
to reach a consensus on this issue, I am to a great extent to believe that
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teachers
would not
be appreciated
equal the past. In what follows, I will pinpoint
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some
outstanding reasons.

To commence, one of the compelling
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reasons
that justify the thesis is that the accessibility of
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people
to the knowledge resources has been greater than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
.
Simply
stated, in this technology era, no one cannot reach the
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given
information while there are the
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Internet
and
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many
social media which is
easily
achievable for everyone in everywhere.
Broadly
speaking,
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people
eliminate their need to knowledge with other assistance
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except for
exclusive dependency on
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teachers
.
For instance
, take my nephew into account, he has access to all kinds of electronic devices such as mobile phone, tablet, and laptop and I
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see
always he is searching everything he needs on the internet of other materials in these devices.
Accordingly
, he claims that he can accomplish his assignments at home without any classes and
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teacher
.
Obviously
, this kind of
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thought
will
be spread
among other
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people
whom it means the
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teachers
do not have the previous site in the community.

Alongside with the
first
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reason
elaborated above, the increasing number of schools and educational institutions is another point which requires meticulous attention. To put in the general words, the
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government
itself
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let
the private agencies to
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add
new institutions to the community. Whereas, the more educational institutions, the more unprofessional
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teachers
will
be increased
. Needless to say that, the validity of professional
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teachers
with a high experience will be
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affected
by this matter.
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As
it can
be testified
from noteworthy meaningful statistics which states that about twenty percent of private institutions which has
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added
newly
have not the half of
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many
state schools efficiencies in the educational improvement of students.
Logically
speaking, the
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society
will be reluctant to acclaim the
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teachers
as long as the numbers of unprofessional trainers are ascending more than
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before
.

In one word, there are
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many
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reasons
which can be state for this catastrophic phenomenon in the
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society
and I mentioned
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some
of them. To recapitulate the
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reasons
, not
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only
high pace increasing of technology have hand in this matter,
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but
also
increasing the number of institutions and alongside unprofessional
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teachers
are effective to decline the
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society
attention towards the
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teachers
.
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But
the answer of
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some
questions is like a drop in bucket and it is that how we can
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help
to return that previous noteworthiness to the
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teachers
?
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 41- Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
471 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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