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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities, what are the possible causes and solutions? v.1

People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities, what are the possible causes and solutions? v. 1
It is true that neighbours do not mingle with themselves and it is destroying the society. There are several reasons for this trend, such as an increase in the level of insecurity and people busy work schedules. However, the government and community can take certain measures to curb this problem. The main reason why people do not interact with people living in the same vicinity is due to increase in criminal activities within their environment. The growing rate of insecurity has led to erection of large barriers, such as high fences and gates between houses in a bid to protect themselves better; however, it makes it difficult for people to look out for their neighbour’s welfare. For instance, the residents of Kings Court estate revealed that the high barriers surrounding their homes were designed to protect their lives and properties from robbers, but it prevents them from taking care of others people belongings. In addition, people are occupied with busy work schedules. Many individual spend a lot of time at work, which hinders them from mingling with their neighbours at home. The government can tackle these problems by improving security measures in residential areas. The provision of constant security patrol teams within the neighbourhood will allow residents feel secure and demolish their high fences. In addition, the community should organise neighbourhood activities, which will encourage people to get together and mingle better. For example, In 2015. The Mayflower estate organise a year-end party as a platform to introduce its entire resident and encourage business networking amongst them. This gathering led to better communal relationship in the estate. In conclusion, people do not relate with individual living in the same environment and it is destroying communal bond. There are various factors responsible for this, but the community and government can tackle it by providing better security measures and organising neighborhood activities.
It is true that
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neighbours
do not mingle with themselves and it is destroying the society. There are several reasons for this trend, such as an increase in the level of insecurity and
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people
busy work schedules.
However
, the
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government
and community can take certain measures to curb this problem.

The main reason why
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people
do not interact with
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people
living in the same vicinity is due to increase in criminal activities within their environment. The growing rate of insecurity has led to erection of large barriers, such as high fences and gates between
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houses
in a bid to protect themselves
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better
;
however
, it
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makes
it difficult for
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people
to look out for their
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neighbour
’s welfare.
For instance
, the residents of Kings Court estate revealed that the high barriers surrounding their homes
were designed
to protect their
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lives
and properties from robbers,
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but
it
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prevents
them from taking care of others
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people
belongings.
In addition
,
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people
are occupied
with busy work schedules.
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Many
individual spend
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a lot of
time at work, which hinders them from mingling with their
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neighbours
at home.

The
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government
can tackle these problems by improving security measures in residential areas. The provision of constant security patrol teams within the
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neighbourhood
will
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allow
residents feel secure and demolish their high fences.
In addition
, the community should
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organise
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neighbourhood
activities, which will encourage
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people
to
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get
together and mingle
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better
.
For example
, In 2015. The Mayflower estate
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organise
a year-
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end
party as a platform to introduce its entire resident and encourage business networking amongst them. This gathering led to
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better
communal relationship in the estate.

In conclusion
,
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people
do not relate with individual living in the same environment and it is destroying communal bond. There are various factors responsible for this,
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but
the community and
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government
can tackle it by providing
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better
security measures and
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organising
neighborhood activities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities, what are the possible causes and solutions? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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