People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our life more comfortable, but it is a pity many traditional values have been lost on the way to such materialism. v.4
People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our life more comfortable, but it is a pity many traditional values have been lost on the way to such materialism. v. 4
It is irrefutable that, recently human is more reliable to the job through purchase more things. Few people believe that, it has made our life flexible, but it has more effect on the national value and nowadays it has significantly lost in the method to such materialism.
To begin with, most of the persons spend much time in their profession, because, of earning more money. They always think affect their dream activity, such as: a car, a big bungalow and stress less soul. Therefore, half of the liveliness they spend for making money and fulfils the dreams. For instance, in this era some of the youngsters buy a new smart phone and they do works hard. Also, they are leaving long distance their families.
On the other hand, the expansion of technology in developing countries influenced people's life style and traditional in various ways. Firstly, in this century, most of the children spend more extent on electronic gadget as compared to the past. Secondly, fast food has become most popular in all over the world. Therefore, some critical diseases are created, like cancer, physical pain and so on. To the next, in India women would wear sarees in the previous, but, now elderly woman also wears gowns, shorts and so on.
In conclusion, although some technologies have good benefits for the people and some are demerits for the children. For example, Mobile, video games and others. Therefore, present years have more easier as compromise the past. However, in this era has lost traditional value.
It is irrefutable that, recently human is more reliable to the job through
purchase
more things. Few
people
believe that, it has made our life flexible,
but
it has more effect on the national value and nowadays it has
significantly
lost in the method to such materialism.
To
begin
with, most of the persons spend much time in their profession,
because
, of earning more money. They always
think
affect their dream activity, such as: a car, a
big
bungalow and
stress
less soul.
Therefore
, half of the liveliness they spend for making money and
fulfils
the dreams.
For instance
, in this era
some of the
youngsters
buy
a new smart
phone and
they do
works
hard
.
Also
, they are leaving long distance their families.
On the other hand
, the expansion of technology in
developing countries
influenced
people
's life style and traditional in various ways.
Firstly
, in this century, most of the children spend more extent on electronic gadget as compared to the past.
Secondly
,
fast
food has become most popular in all over the world.
Therefore
,
some
critical diseases
are created
, like cancer, physical pain and
so
on. To the
next
, in India women would wear sarees in the previous,
but
,
now
elderly woman
also
wears gowns, shorts and
so
on.
In conclusion
, although
some
technologies have
good
benefits for the
people
and
some
are demerits for the children.
For example
, Mobile, video games
and others
.
Therefore
, present years have
more easier
as
compromise the past.
However
, in this era has lost traditional value.
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8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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