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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life What are those problems Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns v.1

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life What are those problems Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns v. 1
For a few decades, many machines have been invented daily due to reduce man costs as well as decrease our workloads. However, it would create an impact on Human's life by reducing body muscle strength and raising people as in-healthy. In this essay, we will discuss both positive and negative aspects with suitable examples. To begin with, we are living in fast environment life conditions, even for taking food also we spend less time only so we require some jobs such as cleaning clothes and vessels to do done in quickly. Hence, we use machines such as washing machine, dish-washer to use for the job to reduce our efforts and spend our time on other works. For instance, the magazine 'The Hindu' has recently surveyed that 70% of job people across India are using machines for their cleaning works at home. On the contrary, a machine reduces Human life through slowdown body movements. Thus, they become over-weight and get stressed, health issues in earlier life. Furthermore, as the machine such as the computer nowadays mostly used for communication, postman works are significantly reduced so they are suffering directly and younger generations could not know the importance of letters. For instance, a local magazine has published an article 'The importance of letters' and expressed that the kids can see letters and postman works' impacts only by movies. To conclude, machines are needed essentially in today's life with no questions. However, we should know the traditional methods also and encourage them whenever is possible. Therefore, the younger generations can know the importance and values.
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costs
as well
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However
, it would create an impact on Human's
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life
by reducing body muscle strength and raising
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people
as in-healthy. In this essay, we will discuss both
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positive
and
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aspects with suitable examples.

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environment
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conditions, even for taking food
also
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we require
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jobs such as cleaning clothes and vessels to do
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, we
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machines
such as washing
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machine
, dish-washer to
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use
for the job to
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reduce
our efforts and spend our time on other works.
For instance
, the magazine 'The Hindu' has recently surveyed that 70% of job
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people
across India are using
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machines
for their cleaning works at home.

On the contrary
, a
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reduces
Human
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life
through slowdown body movements.
Thus
, they become over-weight and
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get
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stressed
, health issues in earlier
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life
.
Furthermore
, as the
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machine
such as the computer nowadays
mostly
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used
for communication, postman works are
significantly
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reduced
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so
they are suffering
directly
and younger generations could not know the importance of letters.
For instance
, a local magazine has published an article 'The importance of letters' and expressed that the kids can
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see
letters and postman works' impacts
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only
by movies.

To conclude
,
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machines
are needed
essentially
in
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today
's
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life
with no questions.
However
, we should know the traditional methods
also
and encourage them whenever is possible.
Therefore
, the younger generations can know the importance and values.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life What are those problems Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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