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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.  v.4

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?  v. 4
Nowadays, citizens are coming across several issues in their daily life while people also have the option to move to regional town in order to get rid of different type (types) of problems which have made their lives miserable. But the question is rising, which types of issued are those? And, Are the citizens needed to encourage to shift (shifting) to other towns by government sector? In this essay, I will highlight some of the problems in city life and give my opinion about how effective changing the location would be if do so. Let’s begin by looking at the difficulty of spending life in cities on (a) regular basis. The main negative is the bulk of traffic that trigger the wastage of most of the precious time of the people. This pile of transports on road not only effect (affect) individual on the regard of time but also creates number of various diseases just because of the emission of hazardous gases from the burning of fuel. For instance, Pakistan is considered to be one of the most polluted country across the globe and due the pollution Pakistanis have to face multiple types of sickness in their everyday life. Moreover, these problems, in the large cities, if do not dare to eradicate it, will cause serious damage in every big city across the world. On the other hand, it is supposed that government should ask them to move to regional town in the remedy of this problem. But, by doing so once cannot be able to enjoy the facilities that have an excess in the big city not in small town. To be more precious, it is to say that people migrate from region to metropolitan cities just for the sake of jobs and if they ask to go back to their respective town will trigger lose in their jobs that is (are) one of the negative (negatives) of it. For example, Karachi holds approximately 25% of the population that are (is) from outside the cities. Furthermore, there should be the other option to avoid facing city’s problem. All thing considered, it is to say that cities are producing (the) severest problem for each body living there on (a) daily basis including time consumption and generation of various disease because of more traffic on road. One of the remedies is to make the people to shift to regional town but this will be hilarious because they come to city to get the job and improve their difficult circumstance. I personally believe there is a need different approach to avoid having everyday problem (problems) of cities.
Nowadays, citizens are coming across several issues in their daily
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life
while
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people
also
have the option to
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move
to regional
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town
in order to
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get
rid of
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different
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type
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(types)
of
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problems
which have made their
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lives
miserable.
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But
the question is rising, which
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types
of issued are those? And, Are the citizens needed to encourage
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to shift
(shifting) to other
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towns
by
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government
sector? In this essay, I will highlight
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some of the
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problems
in city
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life
and give my opinion about how effective changing the location would be if do
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so
.

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Let
’s
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begin
by looking at the difficulty of spending
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life
in
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cities
on (a) regular basis. The main
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negative
is the bulk of traffic that trigger the wastage of most of the precious time of the
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people
. This pile of transports on road not
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only
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effect
(affect) individual on the regard of time
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but
also
creates number of various diseases
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just
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because
of the emission of hazardous gases from the burning of fuel.
For instance
, Pakistan
is considered
to be one of the most polluted country across the globe and
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due the
pollution Pakistanis
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have to
face multiple
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types
of sickness in their everyday
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life
.
Moreover
, these
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problems
, in the large
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cities
, if do not dare to eradicate it, will cause serious damage in every
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big
city across the world.

On the other hand
, it
is supposed
that
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government
should ask them to
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move
to regional
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town
in the remedy of this
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problem
.
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But
, by doing
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so
once cannot be able to enjoy the facilities that have an excess in the
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big
city not in
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small
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town
. To be more precious, it is to say that
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people
migrate from region to metropolitan
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cities
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just
for the sake of jobs and if they ask to go back to their respective
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town
will trigger lose in their jobs
that is
(are) one of the
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negative
(negatives) of it.
For example
, Karachi holds approximately 25% of the population that are (is) from outside the
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cities
.
Furthermore
, there should be the other option to avoid facing city’s problem.

All thing considered, it is to say that
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cities
are producing (the)
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severest
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problem
for each body living there on (a) daily basis including time consumption and generation of various disease
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because
of more traffic on road. One of the remedies is to
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make
the
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people
to shift to regional
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town
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but
this will be hilarious
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because
they
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come
to city to
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get
the job and
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improve
their difficult circumstance. I
personally
believe there is a need
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different
approach to avoid having everyday
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problem
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(problems)
of
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cities
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?  v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
435 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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