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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.11

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 11
Urban population has to face the variety of issues on a daily basis. The two main problems need special attention are the traffic and costly living. Although it is not easy, rather than sending people towards their native towns, the government should pay attention to solve these big cities' problems. The first and foremost, in today's world of busy lives, where everyone is in a hurry, the heavy traffic issues have been increased. Owing to break the rules or because of congested roads and poor infrastructures of metropolitan cities. To illustrate, Karachi is a massively populated city of Pakistan, but due to increased traffic and disorganised construction of roads one cannot even reach the hospital on time. On the other hand, costly living in such cities is undeniable because common people cannot afford to survive in those cities because of high expenses. For instance, if you purchase a grocery of Rs. 5000 per month in a small town, you have to pay double for that, if you go to the large city. So, along with other things, the basic troubles of traffic jam and an expensive living in big cities, bother everyone in their daily life. Even though the ratio of people migrating to big cities is increased without a doubt, sending them back to their home towns is not a solution. Instead of encouraging people to go to their villages or small cities, the government should solve the issues people have to face daily. As an example, a person who has come from a small town to a big city, he might have some needs to fulfil and goals to achieve; and if you send him back it will be an injustice to the person. Therefore, the main focus should be to facilitate the people who come to developed cities, not sending them back. To conclude, while big cities have bigger problems like traffic jam and expenses, the government should find some way to fight against these issues. In my opinion, in order to get rid of all the troubles, the state should not return the people to their homelands.
Urban population
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face the variety of
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issues
on a daily basis. The two main problems need special attention are the
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traffic
and costly living. Although it is not easy,
rather
than sending
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people
towards their native
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towns
, the
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government
should pay attention to solve these
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big
cities' problems.

The
first
and foremost, in
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today
's world of busy
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lives
, where everyone is in a hurry, the heavy
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traffic
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issues
have
been increased
. Owing to break the
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rules
or
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because
of congested roads and poor infrastructures of metropolitan
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cities
. To illustrate, Karachi is a
massively
populated city of Pakistan,
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but
due to increased
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traffic
and
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construction of roads one cannot even reach the hospital on time.
On the other hand
, costly living in such
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cities
is undeniable
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common
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people
cannot afford to survive in those
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cities
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because
of high expenses.
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, if you
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purchase
a grocery of Rs. 5000 per month in a
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small
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town
, you
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have to
pay double for that, if you go to the large city.
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So
, along with other things, the basic troubles of
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traffic
jam and an expensive living in
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big
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cities
, bother everyone in their daily life.

Even though
the ratio of
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people
migrating to
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big
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cities
is increased
without a doubt, sending them back to their home
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towns
is not a solution.
Instead
of encouraging
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people
to go to their villages or
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small
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cities
, the
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government
should solve the
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issues
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people
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have to
face daily. As an example, a person who has
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come
from a
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small
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town
to a
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city, he might have
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some
needs to fulfil and goals to achieve; and if you
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send
him back it will be an injustice to the person.
Therefore
, the main focus should be to facilitate the
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people
who
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come
to developed
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cities
, not sending them back.

To conclude
, while
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big
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cities
have bigger problems like
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traffic
jam and expenses, the
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government
should find
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some
way to fight against these
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issues
. In my opinion, in order to
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get
rid of all the troubles, the state should not return the
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people
to their homelands.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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