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People living in large cities face a number of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems in cities and how can these problems be tackled? v.1

People living in large cities face a number of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems in cities and how can these problems be tackled? v. 1
In recent times, more and more people are living in big cities and urban conurbations are expanding all the time. Although cities offer a great lifestyle and is a land of numerous opportunities, it also hosts some significant social problems affecting the lives of thousands of individuals. This essay will examine some of these problems in detail, and then propose some solutions. One of the major problems facing people who live in cities is the high stress levels. Most of the people living in cities work under high work pressure, often leaving them emaciated at the end of the day. They tend to have not a minute for themselves and fall into the lazy habits of no exercise and eating junk food that worsen the situation. To solve this problem, awareness about health must be created by both the government as well as the organizations. Even more, the number of working hours must be reduced. Another issue is traffic and pollution. With more and more people shifting their base to cities, not only have they become more congested but also the level of pollution as increased dramatically. The exhaust fumes from the cars cause air pollution, and as a consequence, more and more people are suffering from respiratory diseases, such as asthma. This problem could be addressed by charging people who travel alone in car. Finally, another problem is the high property prices in cities. In many cities, buying a house often costs people an arm and leg, leaving them with no other choice than to live on rent. To add insult to injury, the prices of rent houses are often touching the sky. This results in poor health amongst individuals as they often spend their money on houses, leaving them with little to no money for daily expenditure. To sum up, although it is clear that cities face a range of problems, it is un doubtable to solve these issues and improve the quality of life. Governments and local people must join hands to improve the situation, else it will fall into the black hole in near future.
In recent times, more and more
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people
are living in
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big
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cities
and urban conurbations are expanding all the time. Although
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cities
offer a great lifestyle and is a land of numerous opportunities, it
also
hosts
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some
significant social
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problems
affecting the
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lives
of thousands of individuals. This essay will examine
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some
of these
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problems
in detail, and then propose
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some
solutions.

One of the major
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problems
facing
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people
who
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live
in
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cities
is the high
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stress
levels. Most of the
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people
living in
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cities
work under high work pressure,
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often
leaving them emaciated at the
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end
of the day. They tend to have not a minute for themselves and fall into the lazy habits of no exercise and eating junk food that worsen the situation. To solve this
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problem
, awareness about health
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must
be created
by both the
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government
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as well as
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must
be
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reduced
.

Another issue is traffic and pollution. With more and more
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people
shifting their base to
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cities
, not
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only
have they become more congested
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but
also
the level of pollution as increased
dramatically
. The exhaust fumes from the cars cause air pollution, and as a consequence, more and more
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people
are suffering from respiratory diseases, such as asthma. This
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problem
could
be addressed
by charging
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people
who travel alone in car.

Finally
, another
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problem
is the high property prices in
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cities
. In
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many
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cities
, buying a
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house
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often
costs
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people
an arm and leg, leaving them with no other choice than to
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live
on rent. To
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add
insult to injury, the prices of rent
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houses
are
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often
touching the sky. This results in poor health amongst individuals as they
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often
spend their money on
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houses
, leaving them with
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little
to no money for daily expenditure.

To sum up, although it is
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clear
that
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cities
face a range of
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problems
, it is
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un
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doubtable
to solve these issues and
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improve
the quality of life.
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Governments
and local
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people
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must
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join
hands to
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improve
the situation, else it will fall into the black hole in near future.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay People living in large cities face a number of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems in cities and how can these problems be tackled? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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