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Essay topics: Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Essay topics: Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. v. 1
It is common these days for older people who need employment to compete with people much younger for the same type of work. While this can create problems, there are steps that can be taken to reduce the impacts. The main problem is that older people may find it more difficult to secure work, which arises because younger people are more likely to have up-to-date qualifications and experience. For example, information technology is integral to a variety of jobs these days and the skills needed for this are rapidly changing. Young people may well have recent knowledge through university or through using technology in their leisure time. If older people cannot secure work, this leads to other problems. As they are likely to have a family to support, they may not have an adequate income to provide for their children’s education or other such necessities. It is the government that needs to take measures to ameliorate such problems. This needs to begin with ensuring that older people have all the skills needed to compete in the job market, which could be achieved by providing free training on the most important job requirements at local community colleges, for example. In addition to this, the government needs to encourage employers to change their employment practices by promoting the value of experience that older workers can bring to a job. To conclude, the main issue with competition for work between these groups is that older people may start to find it more difficult to find work. However, despite this, through the right training and changes to recruitment practices, older people can compete on an equal footing to the younger generation in the jobs market.
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older
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people
who
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need
employment to compete with
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people
much younger for the same type of
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work
. While this can create
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problems
, there are steps that can
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reduce
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is that
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older
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people
may find it more difficult to secure
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work
, which arises
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younger
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people
are more likely to have up-to-date qualifications and experience.
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, information technology is integral to a variety of
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jobs
these days and the
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skills
needed for this are
rapidly
changing. Young
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people
may well have recent knowledge through university or through using technology in their leisure time. If
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older
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people
cannot secure
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work
, this leads to other
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problems
. As they are likely to have a family to support, they may not have an adequate income to provide for their children’s education or other such necessities.

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government
that
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needs
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problems
. This
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needs
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begin
with ensuring that
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people
have all the
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skills
needed to compete in the
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job
market, which could
be achieved
by providing free training on the most
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important
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job
requirements at local community colleges,
for example
.
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to this, the
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government
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needs
to encourage employers to
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change
their employment practices by promoting the value of experience that
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older
workers can bring to a job.

To conclude
, the main issue with competition for
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work
between these groups is that
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older
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people
may
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start
to find it more difficult to find
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work
.
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changes
to recruitment practices,
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older
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people
can compete on an equal footing to the younger generation in the
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jobs
market.
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IELTS essay Essay topics: Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while other think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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