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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents an do there members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. v.3

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents an do there members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. v. 3
Drug abuse is becoming an alarming situation for almost every society of the world. Unaware of their effects, adolescents are experimenting with both allowed and prohibited drugs in early childhood age. Some social scientist believe that parents and other members of the society are responsible for the growing usage of drugs. This essay will discuss the growing causes and effects of consuming drugs. The first main reason for drug adoption by the youth is their parents and social circle. Parents may consume drugs to remain active at work or to relieve themselves from the mental stress of everyday life. For example, a father of two children starts consuming drug to relax himself mentally when he was not able to provide good education and other facilities for his kids. Thus, this sets a bad example for the children and teenagers mimic the same behaviour to burst out their stress. The other compelling reason which has significantly increased the usage of drugs among the youngsters is media. The fraudulent advertisements of making muscular bodies and loosing weight barely in 10-15 days badly influence the young generation. They start using noxious pills and other drugs to develop muscle and six packs. Though these look appealing, but their continuous consumption without consulting the physician will adversely affect their body. In conclusion, I recommend that organising drug awareness campaigns and counselling programs are the possible way to curb this acute problem. The government and NGO’s should step forward and take the initiative to spread awareness and educate the young people about the detrimental effects of drug addiction. Eventually, by taking these measures we can save the teenagers from drugs and cultivate a healthy environment for them.
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abuse is becoming an alarming situation for almost every society of the world. Unaware of their effects, adolescents are experimenting with both
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allowed
and prohibited
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drugs
in early childhood age.
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Some
social scientist believe that parents and
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other
members of the society are responsible for the growing usage of
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drugs
. This essay will discuss the growing causes and effects of consuming drugs.

The
first
main reason for
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drug
adoption by the youth is their parents and social circle. Parents may consume
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drugs
to remain active at work or to relieve themselves from the mental
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stress
of everyday life.
For example
, a father of two children
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starts
consuming
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drug
to relax himself mentally when he was not able to provide
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good
education and
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other
facilities for his kids.
Thus
, this sets a
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bad
example for the children and
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teenagers
mimic the same
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behaviour
to burst out their
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stress
.

The
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other
compelling reason which has
significantly
increased the usage of
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drugs
among the youngsters is media. The fraudulent advertisements of making muscular bodies and loosing weight
barely
in 10-15 days
badly
influence the young generation. They
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start
using noxious pills and
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other
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drugs
to develop muscle and six packs. Though these look appealing,
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but
their continuous consumption without consulting the physician will
adversely
affect their body.

In conclusion
, I recommend that
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organising
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drug
awareness campaigns and counselling programs are the possible way to curb this acute problem. The
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government
and NGO’s should step forward and take the initiative to spread awareness and educate the young
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people
about the detrimental effects of
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drug
addiction.
Eventually
, by taking these measures we can save the
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teenagers
from
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drugs
and cultivate a healthy environment for them.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents an do there members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. v. 3

Essay
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4 paragraphs
281 words
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