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Some psychologist recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some psychologist recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. v. 1
According to the psychologists, a period of idleness daily is recommended to tackle our day to day stresses. However, I do not agree with this position as this will lead to overthinking; meditation can overcome the stresses. If people choose to heed the psychologist's advice, there would be more time on hand to mull over the stress and overthink. Overthinking, in turn, would create more problems which were never there, to begin with. Mentally ballooning the minor inconvenience into major worrisome stress can further lead to anxiety. Furthermore, not all stresses in our daily lives can be overcome by doing nothing for some time. For instance, the stress of being caught in a road traffic congestion would not simply go away by being idle for a while, it would perhaps exaggerate it. Another argument why I disagree with the suggestion of being inactive for a duration of time during the day is the fact that meditation can alleviate our daily stress. Meditation has been hailed as one of the best stress buster by many experts. It was found that better decisions are made after meditating since one gains better mind clarity this way. Many high-end corporations, for example, have integrated meditation as part of their company's daily work routine to help their workers to cope with the work pressure. In conclusion, I vehemently disagree with the suggestion of doing nothing at all for a duration of time during the day to overcome daily stresses. This is because by doing so, it is certainly going to lead to overthinking, besides one can meditate to cope with their daily pressure. ditate to cope with their daily pressure.
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is recommended
to tackle our
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day to day
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stresses
.
However
, I do not
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agree
with this position as this will lead to overthinking;
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meditation
can overcome the
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stresses
.

If
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people
choose to heed the psychologist's advice, there would be more
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time
on hand to mull over the
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stress
and overthink. Overthinking, in turn, would create more problems which were never there, to
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begin
with. Mentally ballooning the minor inconvenience into major worrisome
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stress
can
further
lead to anxiety.
Furthermore
, not all
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stresses
in our
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daily
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lives
can
be overcome
by doing nothing for
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some
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time
.
For instance
, the
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stress
of
being caught
in a road traffic congestion would not
simply
go away by being idle for a while, it would perhaps exaggerate it.

Another argument why I disagree with the suggestion of being inactive for a duration of
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time
during the day is the fact that
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meditation
can alleviate our
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daily
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stress
.
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Meditation
has
been hailed
as one of the best
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stress
buster by
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many
experts. It
was found
that better decisions
are made
after meditating since one gains better mind clarity this way.
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Many
high-
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end
corporations,
for example
, have integrated
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meditation
as part of their
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company
's
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daily
work routine to
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help
their workers to cope with the work pressure.

In conclusion
, I
vehemently
disagree with the suggestion of doing nothing at all for a duration of
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time
during the day to overcome
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daily
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stresses
. This is
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because
by doing
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so
, it is
certainly
going to lead to overthinking,
besides
one can meditate to cope with their
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daily
pressure.
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ditate
to cope with their
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daily
pressure.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some psychologist recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
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