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Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society. v.1

Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society. v. 1
The relationship between parents and children has undergone a drastic transformation over the last few decades. Parents are no longer the sole authority in a family. This change has certainly affected the way children interact with their parents. In fact, many of them have become disrespectful. Since they repeat the same behaviour outside of their home, it is having a negative effect on the society as well. There are several reasons behind this disturbing trend. Today’s children receive much better education than what their parents received. They have also become smarter and more intelligent thanks to the accessibility of new age technologies. For example, I know many young children who can use their parents’ smart phones much better than them. They can drive vehicles faster. This creates a false sense of superiority and they often look down upon their parents and treat them with disrespect. This was not exactly the case thirty or forty years ago when the skill gap between parents and children were negligible. Another factor that contributed to the growth of disrespectful children is the rise of the nuclear family. Most families now consist of just the parents and one or two kids. These families certainly revolve around these children and it is not uncommon for parents to cater to every whim and fancy of their kids. This makes children more demanding. In my opinion, if children have become disrespectful, it is a problem with their upbringing. Parents who satisfy every need of their children are not doing them a service. Rather they are spoiling them. Parents are required to not only provide their children with food and clothing but also instill values in them. Today’s children may possess higher technical skills and more academic qualifications than their parents. This, however, does not mean that they are wiser. To conclude, there is no denying the fact that children are becoming more disrespectful and this is having a negative impact on the society. However, in my opinion, this is actually a reflection of the poor parenting skills of their parents and the rise of the nuclear family.
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and
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has undergone a drastic transformation over the last few decades.
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are no longer the sole authority in a
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family
. This
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change
has
certainly
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affected
the way
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children
interact with their
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parents
. In fact,
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many
of them have become
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disrespectful
. Since they repeat the same
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behaviour
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outside of
their home, it is having a
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negative
effect on the society
as well
. There are several reasons behind this disturbing trend.

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Today
’s
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children
receive much better education than what their
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parents
received. They have
also
become smarter and more intelligent thanks to the accessibility of new age technologies.
For example
, I know
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many
young
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children
who can
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use
their
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parents’
smart phones much better than them. They can drive vehicles faster. This creates a false sense of
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superiority and
they
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often
look down upon their
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parents
and treat them with disrespect. This was not exactly the case thirty or forty years ago when the
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skill
gap between
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parents
and
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children
were negligible.

Another factor that contributed to the growth of
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disrespectful
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children
is the rise of the nuclear
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family
. Most
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families
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now
consist of
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just
the
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parents
and one or two kids. These
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families
certainly
revolve around these
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children
and it is not uncommon for
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parents
to cater to every whim and fancy of their kids. This
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makes
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children
more demanding.

In my opinion, if
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children
have become
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disrespectful
, it is a problem with their upbringing.
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Parents
who satisfy every need of their
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children
are not doing them a service.
Rather
they are spoiling them.
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are required
to not
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only
provide their
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children
with food and clothing
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but
also
instill values in them.
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Today
’s
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children
may possess higher technical
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skills
and more academic qualifications than their
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parents
. This,
however
, does not mean that they are wiser.

To conclude
, there is no denying the fact that
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children
are becoming more
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disrespectful
and this is having a
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negative
impact on the society.
However
, in my opinion, this is actually a reflection of the poor parenting
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skills
of their
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parents
and the rise of the nuclear
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family
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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