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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v.13

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 13
The people of the Modern world are always in search of new enjoyments and new attractions. While drugs are lifesavers when they are taken for the health issue and prescribed by the doctors, it can also be fatal if taken for temporary amusement. Many special drugs, pills and similar things of that kind are abused by young people and it is a big threat to the future of next generations of the society. This habit starts with smoking and end in fatal addiction in some seriously addictive substances. Because it is legal for the teenagers who are above the age of 16 in many crowded countries or smoke, they start smoking. Then, the issue gets worse and youth want to experience more powerful substances for temporary joy and excitement. A large number of practitioners think it is mainly the fault of parents and responsible relatives or friends. Because youth mostly take examples from them, any bad habit of parents would greatly influence the youth. The family disparity can very negatively affect youth and many times they abuse drugs to get read of the reality or complexity. If parents smoke and drink alcohol, the young children might adapt this habit easily. Another peril is the people and friends with whom young people live and spend time. The groups of teenagers who abuse drugs might induce the innocents. A big cause of widespread drug use is exactly the influence of the environment and friends. Although well-mannered parents send their children to schools to get some quality educations and cultures, in some schools the drug abusers induce them to do wrong things. In my opinion, some prevention measures have to be taken for the welfare of youth. School authority and teachers should make them well disciplined and manage a nice and rigid system in schools that would prevent young children to proceed to wrong ways. The government should make sure that the illegal substances and drugs are not available and should make sure no young people can get it without the authorised prescriptions and parental guidance. Parents should be more attached to their kids and should live ideal life to set an example for your kids.
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drugs
are lifesavers when they
are taken
for the health issue and prescribed by the doctors, it can
also
be fatal if taken for temporary amusement.
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special
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drugs
, pills and similar things of that kind
are abused
by
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young
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people
and it is a
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big
threat to the future of
next
generations of the society.

This habit
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starts
with smoking and
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end
in fatal addiction in
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some
seriously
addictive substances.
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Because
it is legal for the
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teenagers
who are above the age of 16 in
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many
crowded countries or smoke, they
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start
smoking. Then, the issue
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gets
worse and
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youth
want to experience more powerful substances for temporary joy and excitement.

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practitioners
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it is
mainly
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parents
and responsible relatives or friends.
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youth
mostly
take examples from them, any
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bad
habit of
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parents
would
greatly
influence the
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youth
. The family disparity can
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very
negatively
affect
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youth
and
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many
times they abuse
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drugs
to
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get
read of the reality or complexity. If
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parents
smoke and drink alcohol, the
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young
children might adapt this habit
easily
.

Another peril is the
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people
and friends with whom
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young
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people
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live
and spend time. The groups of
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teenagers
who abuse
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drugs
might induce the innocents. A
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big
cause of widespread
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drug
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use
is exactly the influence of the environment and friends. Although well-mannered
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parents
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send
their children to
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schools
to
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get
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some
quality educations and cultures, in
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some
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schools
the
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drug
abusers induce them to do
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wrong
things.

In my opinion,
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some
prevention measures
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have to
be taken
for the welfare of
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youth
.
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School
authority and teachers should
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make
them
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well disciplined
and manage a nice and rigid system in
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schools
that would
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prevent
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young
children to proceed to
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wrong
ways. The
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government
should
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make
sure that the illegal substances and
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drugs
are not available and should
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make
sure no
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young
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people
can
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get
it without the
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authorised
prescriptions and parental guidance.
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Parents
should be more attached to their kids and should
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live
ideal life to set an example for your kids.
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IELTS essay People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
363 words
5.5
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