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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v.12

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 12
Drug addiction has become a serious problem in our society. It has spoiled dreams and aspirations of thousands of families. The fascinating story of the addicts is that once they accustomed to heinous habit, they cannot get rid of it regardless how they endeavour themselves. Especially, youth are used to drug abuse in my society. So, it is crucial to find the reasons behind their deadly habits. Very thoughtful decisions should be taken to help the youngsters to fight the drug abusing problems. The first and foremost reason of this problem is the peer- pressure. As young people hangs out most time with dearer and nearer pals and some may be drug abusers, who compel their chaps to do drugs. Secondly, we can see advertisements, films that show using drugs in a seductive manner. The young have the habit of imitating whatever their best actor do, they no longer keep away themselves doing drugs. In long run, this little curiosity guides them to notorious drug abusers. Thirdly, young people have the attitudes of trying different things in their adolescents. As life is not a bed of roses, they may take drugs to forget all their worries. Family problem, psychological problem and bad influences of friends can be very lethal sometimes as they are sometimes the root causes for young people to try drugs. Doing drug spoils the peace and harmony of the family. The druggist son steals cash and kinds to purchase drugs. Later, the family is engulfed in debt.   Another effect of the drug is it may take the life of drug abusers as they hardly give up evil and anti-social habit. If drug abusers exchange the needle among friends, they are vulnerable to transmission of deadly disease like AIDS. In a society where young people abuse drugs, naturally, the crime rates would be high there. More fights and murders could be observed in such areas and there must be personal, social and generation related problems related to widespread drug abusing.   Only a single drug abuser in a family can ruin the whole family and thus a generation declined to drug abusing would bring heinous problems to the country. To wipe out drug from society educational programmes should be organised in school, colleges. Rehabilitation centres must be established to assess druggists. Advertisement of drugs, alcohol should be banned from the TV. Families should keep an eye on the bad companies their teenagers are spending time with and finally the family bonding and understanding should be strong enough to discourage the teenagers not to do something that would bring shame for the family. Governments must ensure that their law enforcing organisations are working hard to wipe out the illegal drug businesses from the country and strict laws should be imposed and implemented to punish the illegal drug business people. To recapitulate, drug abusers are evil of family, society and nation. The responsible bureaucrats and government must crack down on drugs to utilise young blood for the progress of a nation.
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addiction has become a serious
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problem
in our
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. It has spoiled dreams and aspirations of thousands of
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families
. The fascinating story of the addicts is that once they accustomed to heinous
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habit
, they cannot
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abuse in my
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.
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thoughtful decisions should
be taken
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help
the youngsters to fight the
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drug
abusing problems.

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first
and foremost reason of this
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problem
is the peer- pressure. As
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young
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people
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out most time with dearer and nearer pals and
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abusers, who compel their chaps to do
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.
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using
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drugs
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. The
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have the
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of imitating whatever their best actor do, they no longer
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away themselves doing
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drugs
. In long run, this
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little
curiosity guides them to notorious
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drug
abusers.
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,
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young
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people
have the attitudes of trying
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different
things in their adolescents. As life is not a bed of roses, they may take
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drugs
to forget all their worries.
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problem
, psychological
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and
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bad
influences of friends can be
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very
lethal
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sometimes
as they are
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sometimes
the root causes for
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young
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people
to try drugs.

Doing
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drug
spoils the peace and harmony of the
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family
. The druggist son steals cash and kinds to
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purchase
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drugs
. Later, the
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family
is engulfed
in debt.
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Another effect of the
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drug
is it may take the life of
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drug
abusers as they hardly give up evil and anti-social
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habit
. If
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drug
abusers exchange the needle among friends, they are vulnerable to transmission of deadly disease like AIDS. In a
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society
where
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young
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people
abuse
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drugs
,
naturally
, the crime rates would be high there. More fights and murders could
be observed
in such areas and there
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must
be personal, social and generation related
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problems
related to widespread
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drug
abusing.
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a single
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drug
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abuser
in a
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family
can ruin the whole
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family
and
thus
a generation declined to
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drug
abusing would bring heinous
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problems
to the country.

To wipe out
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drug
from
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society
educational
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programmes
should be
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organised
in school, colleges. Rehabilitation
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centres
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must
be established
to assess druggists.
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drugs
, alcohol should
be banned
from the TV.
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Families
should
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keep
an eye on the
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bad
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companies
their
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teenagers
are spending time with and
finally
the
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family
bonding and understanding should be strong
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enough
to discourage the
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teenagers
not to do something that would bring shame for the
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family
.
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Governments
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must
ensure that their law enforcing
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organisations
are working
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hard
to wipe out the illegal
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drug
businesses from the country and strict laws should
be imposed
and implemented to punish the illegal
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drug
business
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people
.

To recapitulate,
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drug
abusers are evil of
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family
,
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society
and nation. The responsible bureaucrats and
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government
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must
crack down on
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drugs
to
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utilise
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young
blood for the progress of a nation.
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IELTS essay People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
502 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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