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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v.1

People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v. 1
There is an argument that centres on people do not need to go to the cinema by which to enjoy the movies at home or films are fully performance at movie theatres. Even though many smart gadgets could give opportunities to see movies at anywhere, in my opinion, I highly believe it is better to be seen in the cinema. On the one hand, many people have emphasized that we do not need to go to the cinema because nowadays most movies are can be seen on smart gadgets. To begin with, if people can see films at home with own gadgets, each one of them can spend to do other together. In addition, if see the movie anywhere people can choose the movie when they want, what they want, and where they want. As a result, people multi task and spend time very usefully. For example, these days, many people spend time with Netflix at home, while they do some housework too. On the other hand, I highly believe that movies have to be seen at the cinema, that is the best way of enjoying it. Firstly, the movie theatre is made for watching movies, which means cinema is the most suitable place for movies but other else. Take me as a perfect analogy in this situation - when I saw the movie is titled Interstella at the IMAX theatre, the movie touched my mind with everything but a few months later I watched it again at home, it was still good but not that much. Secondly, people can focus only on the movie, which make people fully understand the story of the film and enjoying it. Finally, score of cinema directly gives effect to the movie makers, so watch movie at the cinema is one of the best way to support them one kind of investigation to good film makers. In conclusion, although movie can be seen anywhere with phones or tablets, in my point of view, I am convinced that the movie theatre is the best place to see movies.
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centres
on
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people
do not need to go to the
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cinema
by which to enjoy the
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movies
at home or films are
fully
performance at
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movie
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theatres
.
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many
smart gadgets could give opportunities to
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see
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movies
at anywhere, in my opinion, I
highly
believe it is better to be
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seen
in the cinema.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
have emphasized that we do not need to go to the
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cinema
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because
nowadays most
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movies
are can be
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seen
on smart gadgets. To
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begin
with, if
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people
can
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see
films at home with
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own
gadgets, each one of them can spend to do other together.
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, if
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see
the
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movie
anywhere
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people
can choose the
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movie
when they want, what they want, and where they want.
As a result
,
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people
multi task and spend time
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very
usefully
.
For example
, these days,
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many
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people
spend time with Netflix at home, while they do
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some
housework too.

On the other hand
, I
highly
believe that
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movies
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have to
be
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seen
at the
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cinema
,
that is
the best way of enjoying it.
Firstly
, the
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movie
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theatre
is made
for watching
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movies
, which means
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cinema
is the most suitable place for
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movies
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but
other else. Take me as a perfect analogy in this situation
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-
when I
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saw
the
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movie
is titled
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Interstella
at the IMAX
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theatre
, the
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movie
touched my mind with everything
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but
a few months later I
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watched
it again at home, it was
still
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good
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but
not that much.
Secondly
,
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people
can focus
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only
on the
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movie
, which
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make
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people
fully
understand the story of the film and enjoying it.
Finally
, score of
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cinema
directly
gives effect to the
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movie
makers,
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so
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watch
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movie
at the
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cinema
is one of the best way to support them one kind of investigation to
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good
film makers.

In conclusion
, although
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movie
can be
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seen
anywhere with phones or tablets, in my point of view, I
am convinced
that the
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movie
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theatre
is the best place to
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see
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movies
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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