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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v.2

People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v. 2
Even though as a part of nature, each human being has a great responsibility to understand and protect the environment in which the humankind are living, the important role of natural world in our daily life has been neglected by people around the globe in the last few decades. This dereliction of duty has had several impacts not only on the fate of the biodiversity of the planet, but also on the living conditions of every human on earth. In this essay, I will discuss the main reasons that cause humans’ ignorance towards environmental matters and offer some measures to tackle this problem. The root of today’s ignorant attitude towards the natural world lies within the modern society itself. Among many possible reasons that give rise to the environmental unawareness, the lack of ecological education in academic systems is considered to be the main culprit. While biology is one of the main subjects in schools which teaches about the nature, its teaching contents rarely dig deeper into specific topics like ecology, zoology, botany or environmental protection at the level beyond the basic. Recent research has shown that 40% of students around the world have never heard of or been taught in schools about our current ecosystems’ issues such as climate change or endangered species. Another development of human society that cause the lack of awareness about the nature is the technological advancement. New technologies with great potential to replace the nature’s function on the planet such as artificial trees or robotic animals have caused people to believe that humans are not part of the natural world and therefore do not need to care for the Mother Earth herself. In order to deal with the aforementioned matters, our education system should include nature awareness in school curriculum as the main subject with detailed knowledge about the natural world and organize more wildlife picnics to teach students to be environmentally responsible. Furthermore, the government should promote the importance of the natural world by stepping up their environmental awareness programs in the influential social domains such as the entertainment industry. For example, the movie industry should encourage filmmakers to deliver a powerful message about the environment on screen more frequently to inspire people to seek knowledge about this kind of topic. Once the modern citizens are motivated to improve their understanding of the natural world, the environmental unawareness will be decreased. In conclusion, it must be said the lack of understanding around environmental matters are a contentious issue with no easy solutions. However, in my mind, it is vital to include all environmental topics as important parts of school curriculums to cultivate nature awareness for people from a young age. It is not unrealistic to expect that concentrating on the environmental education of young students will help raise awareness of the natural world in the future.
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being has a great responsibility to understand and protect the environment in which the humankind are living, the
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important
role of
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natural
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world
in our daily life has
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people
around the globe in the last few decades. This dereliction of duty has had several impacts not
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only
on the fate of the biodiversity of the planet,
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but
also
on the living conditions of every
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human
on earth. In this essay, I will discuss the
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main
reasons that cause
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humans’
ignorance towards
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environmental
matters and offer
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some
measures to tackle this problem.

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today
’s ignorant attitude towards the
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natural
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world
lies within the modern society itself. Among
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many
possible reasons that give rise to the
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environmental
unawareness, the lack of ecological education in academic systems
is considered
to be the
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main
culprit. While biology is one of the
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main
subjects in
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schools
which teaches about the
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nature
, its teaching contents rarely dig deeper into specific topics like ecology, zoology, botany or
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environmental
protection at the level beyond the basic. Recent research has shown that 40% of students around the
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world
have never heard of or
been taught
in
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schools
about our
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current
ecosystems’ issues such as climate
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change
or endangered species. Another development of
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human
society that cause the lack of
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awareness
about the
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nature
is the technological advancement. New technologies with great potential to replace the
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nature’s
function on the planet such as artificial trees or robotic animals have caused
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people
to believe that
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humans
are not part of the
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natural
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world
and
therefore
do not need to care for the Mother Earth herself.

In order to deal with the aforementioned matters, our education system should include
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nature
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awareness
in
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school
curriculum as the
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main
subject with detailed knowledge about the
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natural
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world
and organize more wildlife picnics to teach students to be
environmentally
responsible.
Furthermore
, the
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government
should promote the importance of the
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natural
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world
by stepping up their
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environmental
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awareness
programs in the influential social domains such as the entertainment industry.
For example
, the movie industry should encourage filmmakers to deliver a powerful message about the environment on screen more
frequently
to inspire
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people
to seek knowledge about this kind of topic. Once the modern citizens
are motivated
to
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improve
their understanding of the
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natural
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world
, the
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environmental
unawareness will
be decreased
.

In conclusion
, it
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must
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the lack of understanding around
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environmental
matters are a contentious issue with no easy solutions.
However
, in my mind, it is vital to include all
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environmental
topics as
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important
parts of
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school
curriculums to cultivate
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nature
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awareness
for
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people
from a young age. It is not unrealistic to
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expect
that concentrating on the
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environmental
education of young students will
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help
raise
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awareness
of the
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natural
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world
in the future.
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IELTS essay People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
473 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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