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People doing different jobs enjoy different amount of holiday time Should people have the same amount of holiday time Give your opinion v.1

People doing different jobs enjoy different amount of holiday time Should people have the same amount of holiday time Give your opinion v. 1
There is no government in this world which is untouched by the phenomenon of transportation. Recent studies indicate that this trend is only likely to accentuate in the coming decades, considering the ground realities of the modern world. Increasingly laid out for all to see and fast becoming a fixture of many discussions that pertains to whether government should allot more budget on railways rather than roadways or not. This essay shall analyse this issue from every angle and argue that spending finances to improve railways has several benefits. A quick perusal of the issue at hand would throw up a surfeit of seminal reasons supporting some peoples' perspective that the authorities should spend money on roadways rather than railways. Firstly, it will help the general public to a greater extent since road transportation is the most commonly used by the people. For instance, students commuting to their colleges by college buses, most employees use their two wheelers to reach their workplace, and so on. They also feel that it will reduce the traffic snarls which are mainly due to the poor road infrastructure. To top it all, it is their contention that it will diminish the road accidents by which people losing their life. However, if we are honest about it, we might acknowledge that the above-mentioned viewpoint is an intensely insensitive and rankly remote less approach to the whole issue, which only showcases the intellectual bankruptcy of our current existences and provides an irrefutable evidence of how desensitised we are, both emotionally and morally. In my arsenal of arguments supporting the viewpoint that bureaucrats should develop the railways by spending more fund rather than spend on roads since it has numerous advantages, one of the most potent is that it will bring the prices down for the daily consumables. For instance, trains can transport tons of products from one place to another on a single trip and hence the transportation charges reduced to a great extent resulting in the affordable product price. I also feel that it will greatly help to eradicate the poverty which occurs due to price inflation. Additionally, adding succour to my line of reasoning is the various research topics which show the significant correlation between the railways and the dependence of commodities. Finally, I would opine it will play a vital role in the country's economic development. Having considered both sides, it seems ever so sensible to register my agreement with the statement that the government should allocate extra bill on railways rather than roadways.
There is no
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government
in this world which
is untouched
by the phenomenon of transportation. Recent studies indicate that this trend is
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only
likely to accentuate in the coming decades, considering the ground realities of the modern world.
Increasingly
laid out for all to
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see
and
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fast
becoming a fixture of
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many
discussions that pertains to whether
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government
should allot more budget on
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railways
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rather
than roadways or not. This essay shall
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analyse
this issue from every angle and argue that spending finances to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
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railways
has several benefits.

A quick perusal of the issue at hand would throw up a surfeit of seminal reasons supporting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
peoples' perspective that the authorities should spend money on roadways
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
.
Firstly
, it will
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help
the
Consider using "public".
general public
to a greater extent since
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road
transportation is the most
commonly
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used
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
For instance
, students commuting to their colleges by college buses, most employees
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use
their
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two wheelers
to reach their workplace, and
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so
on. They
also
feel that it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the traffic snarls which are
mainly
due to the poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
infrastructure. To top it all, it is their contention that it will diminish the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
accidents by which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
losing their
Did you mean "lives"?
life
.

However
, if we are honest about it, we might acknowledge that the above-mentioned viewpoint is an
intensely
insensitive and
rankly
remote less approach to the whole issue, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
showcases the intellectual bankruptcy of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
existences and provides an irrefutable evidence of how
Possible spelling mistake. 'desensitised' is British English.
desensitised
we are, both
emotionally
and
morally
.

In my arsenal of arguments supporting the viewpoint that bureaucrats should develop the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
by spending more fund
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rather
than spend on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
since it has numerous advantages, one of the most potent is that it will bring the prices down for the daily consumables.
For instance
, trains can transport tons of products from one place to another on a single trip and
hence
the transportation charges
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
to a great extent resulting in the affordable product price. I
also
feel that it will
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to eradicate the poverty which occurs due to price inflation.
Additionally
, adding
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succour
to my line of reasoning is the various research topics which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the significant correlation between the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
and the dependence of commodities.
Finally
, I would opine it will play a vital role in the country's economic development.

Having considered both sides, it seems ever
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
sensible to register my agreement with the statement that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should allocate extra bill on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rather
than roadways.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay People doing different jobs enjoy different amount of holiday time Should people have the same amount of holiday time Give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
421 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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