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People cart eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas As a result people eat more food produced in other regions than local food Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v.1

People cart eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas As a result people eat more food produced in other regions than local food Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v. 1
In the past, dwellers' diet was undiversified and could eat foods, which produced in their local areas. On the contrary, because of advanced technologies, these images have been changing when people can experience various foods in other countries. However, this causes both the pros and cons that I will examine in this essay. In the one hand, thanks to modern transportation, people can try several delicious cuisines that they do not need to go overseas. For example, city-dwellers in china can buy Vietnamese bread in their own country or those who live in the North Pole can eat fruits as they cannot grow in a cold place. Moreover, this improvement can provide a link of trading foods among several countries, creating a huge profit for their economic. Furthermore, citizens, who want to have a permanent job, are capable of having a chance to find it. For instance, an export company will hire more employees to meet import countries' requirements for manufacturing products. In the other hand, imported foods have overweighed disadvantage points. when exporting the goods such as fruits, vegetables, or slices of beef, exporters have to spray the fertilizers or preservative substance to make the foods fresher, which cause directly harmful to people' s health. To illustrate, a thousand imported bottles of milk from china are found that it contains melamine causing a hundred of thousands of infant deaths in the United States. Another disadvantage of foods importing is the high price of overseas' products causing inflation in a country. For instance, Iraq' s authorities have to reduce the price of local foods to stimulate consumers to buy it. In conclusion, imported foods have its pros and cons that I mentioned above. I think this trend should tackle in order to balance the consumption of the local areas foods and other regions.
In the past,
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dwellers&
#039; diet was
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undiversified
and could eat
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foods
, which produced in their local areas.
On the contrary
,
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because
of advanced technologies, these images have been changing when
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people
can experience various
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foods
in other
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countries
.
However
, this causes both the pros and cons that I will examine in this essay.

In the one hand, thanks to modern transportation,
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people
can try several delicious cuisines that they do not need to go overseas.
For example
, city-dwellers in
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china
can
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buy
Vietnamese bread in their
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own
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country
or those who
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live
in the North Pole can eat fruits as they cannot grow in a
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cold
place.
Moreover
, this improvement can provide a link of trading
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foods
among several
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countries
, creating a huge profit for their economic.
Furthermore
, citizens, who want to have a permanent job, are capable of having a chance to find it.
For instance
, an export
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company
will hire more employees to
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meet
import
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countries&
#039; requirements for manufacturing products.

In the other hand, imported
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foods
have
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overweighed
disadvantage points.
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when
exporting the
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goods
such as fruits, vegetables, or slices of beef, exporters
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have to
spray the fertilizers or preservative substance to
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make
the
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foods
fresher, which cause
directly
harmful to
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people&
#039; s health. To illustrate, a thousand imported bottles of milk from
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china
are found
that it contains melamine causing a hundred of thousands of infant deaths in the United States. Another disadvantage of
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foods
importing is the high price of
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overseas&
#039; products causing inflation in a
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country
.
For instance
,
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Iraq&
#039; s authorities
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have to
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reduce
the price of local
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foods
to stimulate consumers to
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buy
it.

In conclusion
, imported
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foods
have its pros and cons that I mentioned above. I
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think
this trend should tackle in order to balance the consumption of the local areas
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foods
and other regions.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay People cart eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas As a result people eat more food produced in other regions than local food Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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