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People can solve important problems by themselves or by their families thus it is almost not necessary to refer to the government v.1

People can solve important problems by themselves or by their families thus it is almost not necessary to refer to the government v. 1
The railways have become the lifeline of many developing countries. It is often believed that the government should fund excessively to rail transport as compared to road transportation. I strongly agree with this argument, this essay will discuss how railways have the edge over roadways. To begin with, the greatest advantage of trains is that they have a high capacity to accommodate huge crowd of people over a longer area. Due to the burgeoning population need to carry more individuals has become a necessity. For example, for city like the Mumbai rails are their lifeline, there are 95% people commute to work daily by train. Overall, the trains play crucial role in travelling by carrying large number of people. Secondly, the railways are cheap and the fastest mode of transport. In fast-paced life, everyone wants to reach their destination on time. The trains are more affordable by common man these are reasons why an increasing number of the masses travel by train. For instance, in a recent survey, it is shown that in comparison to roadways, the rails are the fastest mode of transportation and less expensive. In short, the rails are more convenient for an average person to travel the longer length. To conclude, for travelling long distance, the railways are very good option. This essay discussed the benefits of railways and how it is better than road transport. In my opinion, the trains are always better for long distance travelling. In future, more trains will be seen as the government is building more railway tracks and spending excess money to do it.
The
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railways
have become the lifeline of
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many
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developing countries
. It is
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often
believed that the
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government
should fund
excessively
to
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rail
transport as compared to road transportation. I
strongly
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agree
with this argument, this essay will discuss how
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railways
have the edge over roadways.

To
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begin
with, the greatest advantage of
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trains
is that they have a high capacity to accommodate huge crowd of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
over a longer area. Due to the burgeoning population need to carry more individuals has become a necessity.
For example
, for city like the Mumbai rails are their lifeline, there are 95%
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people
commute to work daily by
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train
.
Overall
, the
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trains
play crucial role in travelling by carrying large number of
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people
.

Secondly
, the
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railways
are
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cheap
and the fastest mode of transport. In
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fast
-paced life, everyone wants to reach their destination on time. The
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trains
are more affordable by common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
these are reasons why an increasing number of the masses travel by
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train
.
For instance
, in a recent survey, it
is shown
that
in comparison
to roadways, the rails are the fastest mode of transportation and less expensive. In short, the rails are more convenient for an average person to travel the longer length.

To conclude
, for travelling long distance, the
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railways
are
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very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
option. This essay discussed the benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
and how it is better than road transport. In my opinion, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
are always better for long distance travelling.
Did you mean: "In the future"?
In future
, more
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trains
will be
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seen
as the
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government
is building more
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railway
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tracks
and spending excess money to do it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People can solve important problems by themselves or by their families thus it is almost not necessary to refer to the government v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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