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Agree or disagree? People can solve the most problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families; help from the government is often not necessary. v.1

Agree or disagree? People can solve the most problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families; help from the government is often not necessary. v. 1
Education lays the foundation stone for the success and progress in life. Nowadays, with the boom in the field of information technology, several online courses are available to the students at the tertiary level of education. It is often debated whether this form of online education has its merits or its demerits. However, in my opinion, it has a definite positive effect on the student community which I will discuss over the course of my essay. Undoubtedly, online courses offered by various universities have their own advantages. Firstly, they actually give wings to the thought that the world is flat and it is an important factor which can bind people from all parts of the globe together. Due to these online courses, students from different parts of the world get a chance to study in the world-renowned universities which are far away from their hometown. This, in turn, is very economical and convenient to the students. To illustrate, all major universities in the UK import higher education to at least 30-40% of foreign students through their online courses in the respective streams. Moreover, economically deprived students can continue their quest for knowledge through these online courses which save them the money needed to travel and relocate to a new city. For example, in a recently conducted survey in India, it was found that this trend of online education has doubled the number of the students going for university education who would have otherwise backed out due to financial constraints. Last but not the least, it enables professional to pursue higher studies to improve their job prospects. To specify, most of the management colleges offer online management courses which help working people to improve their qualification without quitting their job. Having said this, it is also true such online courses have few drawbacks. Like, online courses are unsuitable for subjects which need practical hands-on experience. For example, science subjects like physics, chemistry, and biology involve a lot of laboratory-based exercises which cannot be fulfilled through online teaching. To conclude, I believe that online courses offered by universities greatly help the students to pursue higher education and their advantages clearly outweigh their shortcomings. In fact, online courses actually help to spread education far and wide instead of restricting it to the confines of the classroom.
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lays the foundation stone for the success and progress in life. Nowadays, with the boom in the field of information technology, several
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online
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courses
are available to the
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students
at the tertiary level of
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education
. It is
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often
debated whether this form of
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online
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education
has its merits or its demerits.
However
, in my opinion, it has a
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definite
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positive
effect on the
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student
community which I will discuss over the
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course
of my essay.

Undoubtedly
,
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online
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courses
offered by various
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universities
have their
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own
advantages.
Firstly
, they actually give wings to the
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thought
that the world is flat and it is an
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important
factor which can bind
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people
from all parts of the globe together. Due to these
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online
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courses
,
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students
from
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different
parts of the world
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get
a chance to study in the world-renowned
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universities
which are far away from their hometown. This, in turn, is
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very
economical and convenient to the
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students
. To illustrate, all major
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universities
in the UK import higher
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education
to at least 30-40% of foreign
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students
through their
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online
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courses
in the respective streams.
Moreover
,
economically
deprived
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students
can continue their quest for knowledge through these
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online
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courses
which save them the money needed to travel and relocate to a new city.
For example
, in a recently conducted survey in India, it
was found
that this trend of
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online
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education
has doubled the number of the
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students
going for
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university
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education
who would have
otherwise
backed out due to financial constraints. Last
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but
not the least, it enables professional to pursue higher studies to
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improve
their job prospects. To specify, most of the management colleges offer
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online
management
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courses
which
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to work" or "work".
working
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people
to
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improve
their qualification without quitting their job.

Having said this, it is
also
true such
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online
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courses
have few drawbacks. Like,
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online
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courses
are unsuitable for subjects which need practical hands-on experience.
For example
, science subjects like physics, chemistry, and biology involve
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a lot of
laboratory-based exercises which cannot
be fulfilled
through
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online
teaching.

To conclude
, I believe that
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online
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courses
offered by
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universities
greatly
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help
the
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students
to pursue higher
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education
and their advantages
clearly
outweigh their shortcomings. In fact,
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online
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courses
actually
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help
to spread
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education
far and wide
instead
of restricting it to the confines of the classroom.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Agree or disagree? People can solve the most problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families; help from the government is often not necessary. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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