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Do you agree or disagree It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation v.1

It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation v. 1
According to some individuals, travellers should follow local customs and behaviour of the place they visit. On the contrary, others believe that the travellers must be welcomed irrespective of the cultural differences. This is one of the most debated topics. Travellers and receiving countries should consider each others traditions and cultures so as to be mutually benefited. This essay will discuss both views followed by opinion. Firstly, it is very important to respect the culture of the host nation that a person visits to. For this, he has to acquire some knowledge and learn the behaviour and some traditions that are widely accepted there just before travelling. In fact, this study makes one's trip more interesting and can prepare him/her for the cultural differences. The natives would definitely appreciate such efforts and warmly welcome tourists. For instance, some travel agents suggest the visitors to dress according to the destination country's tradition, so as to show respect to the place they visit. This will show the travellers positive attitude towards the culture of the place and would force local people to come down one step to make him feel at home. However, local people should be encouraged to accept the visitors with their cultural differences. When they are welcomed warmly, tourists not only feel at home, but also appreciate the hospitality of the people of the host country. This, in turn, will boost the economy of the nation due to flourishing travel industry. A recent survey revealed that travellers often prefer going to place which accept diverse cultures. In fact, they suggest such places to other travellers by giving positive reviews. Hence, for the economic benefit, countries should receive visitors from diverse cultures warmly. To sum up, I believe that both the visitors and the host nations should accept and respect diverse cultures as both would be beneficial to each other.
According to
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some
individuals,
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travellers
should follow local customs and
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behaviour
of the
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place
they visit.
On the contrary
, others believe that the
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travellers
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must
be welcomed
irrespective of the cultural differences. This is one of the most debated topics.
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Travellers
and receiving countries should consider each others traditions and
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cultures
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
be
mutually
benefited. This essay will discuss both views followed by opinion.

Firstly
, it is
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very
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important
to respect the
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culture
of the host nation that a person visits to. For this, he
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has to
acquire
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some
knowledge and learn the
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behaviour
and
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some
traditions that are
widely
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accepted
there
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just
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before
travelling. In fact, this study
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makes
one's trip more interesting and can prepare him/her for the cultural differences. The natives would definitely appreciate such efforts and
warmly
welcome tourists.
For instance
,
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some
travel agents suggest the
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visitors
to dress according to the destination country's tradition,
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so as to
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show
respect to the
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place
they visit. This will
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show
the
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travellers
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positive
attitude towards the
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culture
of the
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place
and would force local
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people
to
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come
down one step to
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make
him feel at home.

However
, local
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people
should
be encouraged
to accept the
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visitors
with their cultural differences. When they
are welcomed
warmly
, tourists not
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only
feel at home,
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but
also
appreciate the hospitality of the
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people
of the host country. This, in turn, will boost the economy of the nation due to flourishing travel industry. A recent survey revealed that
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travellers
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often
prefer going to
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place
which accept diverse
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cultures
. In fact, they suggest such
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places
to
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other
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travellers
by giving
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positive
reviews.
Hence
, for the economic benefit, countries should receive
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visitors
from diverse
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cultures
warmly
.

To sum up, I believe that both the
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visitors
and the host nations should accept and respect diverse
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cultures
as both would be beneficial to each
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other
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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