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People believe that these days there is a general increase in anti social behviour and lack of respect for other. what might have caused this? How to improve this? v.1

People believe that these days there is a general increase in anti social behviour and lack of respect for other. what might have caused this? How to improve this? v. 1
It is a fact that we are living in the age of the global village, but far away from our cultural and social values. Most of the people believe that our behaviours are becoming anti-social and less respectful towards others. This essay will discuss that lack of education and time are the causes and put forward steps to resolve this issue. There are many causes of less respect for others, but a lack of education is the primary one. It is an obvious fact that an educated person is civilized as compared to the uneducated person. In other words, he deals with people of all age groups with respectful manners. Moreover, even in a worst scenario, educated person tries not to misbehave with others just because of his education. Another reason of anti-social behaviour is a lack of time. As life gets busier, even parents do not have time to spend with their children. They spend all of their time in earning money so that they can meet the needs. Meanwhile, they forgot to train their children how to behave with others. As a result, children with less training from their parents ultimately lead to a society with less manners. There are many ways to improve this issue. Primarily, the government should take an initiative to educate a society by making education free of cost for all. Secondly, the government should introduce and make a law regarding dis-respectful behaviours. Finally, parents should spend some time with their children to teach them about the rules and regulation of a society. In conclusion, these days, lack of education and time are the causes of anti-social behaviour and this can be solved by providing education to all by the government and parents. As a well-educated society would eventually lead to civilized society.
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but
far away from our cultural and social values. Most of the
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people
believe that our
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behaviours
are becoming anti-social and
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less
respectful towards others. This essay will discuss that
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lack
of
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education
and
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time
are the causes and put forward steps to resolve this issue.

There are
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many
causes of
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less
respect for others,
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but
a
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lack
of
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education
is the primary one. It is an obvious fact that an educated person
is civilized
as compared to the uneducated person. In
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other
words, he deals with
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people
of all age groups with respectful manners.
Moreover
, even in
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a
worst scenario, educated person tries not to misbehave with others
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just
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because
of his education.

Another reason of anti-social
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behaviour
is a
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lack
of
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time
. As life
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gets
busier, even
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parents
do not have
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time
to spend with their
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children
. They spend all of their
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time
in earning money
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so
that they can
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meet
the needs. Meanwhile, they forgot to train their
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children
how to behave with others.
As a result
,
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children
with
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less
training from their
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parents
ultimately
lead to a
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society
with
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less
manners.

There are
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many
ways to
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improve
this issue.
Primarily
, the
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government
should take an initiative to educate a
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society
by making
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education
free of cost for all.
Secondly
, the
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government
should introduce and
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make
a law regarding dis-respectful
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behaviours
.
Finally
,
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parents
should spend
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some
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time
with their
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children
to teach them about the
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rules
and regulation of a society.

In conclusion
, these days,
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lack
of
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education
and
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time
are the causes of anti-social
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behaviour
and this can
be solved
by providing
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education
to all by the
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government
and
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parents
.
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As
a well-educated
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society
would
eventually
lead to civilized
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society
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Learning is a treasure that will follow its owner everywhere.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay People believe that these days there is a general increase in anti social behviour and lack of respect for other. what might have caused this? How to improve this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
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