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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. ). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v.4

People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. ). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v. 4
The government and citizens of a country sometimes have contrasting views about how their country’s progress should be measured. While I agree that economic progress is essential, I believe that other forms of progress are just as important. There are three key reasons why economic growth is considered by governments around the world to be the fundamental metric for national progress. First, a healthy economy results in a more satisfied citizenry as unemployment is lower than during periods of economic unrest. Second, economic progress generates more tax revenue for governments. This in turn allows governments to invest in social services, healthcare, education, military or whatever else they see as necessary. Finally, a strong economy can help a country improve or maintain a country’s international reputation, which allows for more influence and trading power on the global stage. Nonetheless, other forms of progress that exist independent of economic progress can be equally relevant in measuring a country’s success. A country’s adult literacy rate, for example, can be used to measure social equality as well as economic growth potential. This is because literate adults are able to partake in skilled labor and are also likely to pass on their literacy skills to the next generation. Another key measure of progress is how well the country is protecting its natural environment. Regardless of the wealth of a country, it will not have a satisfied and healthy population if the environment is in ruin. Alternatively, the overall happiness of its residents can be an extremely relevant measure of a country’s success. In conclusion, while it is obvious that economic health is a key marker of a country’s success, other educational, environmental, and psychological metrics are equally significant.
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country
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sometimes
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country’s
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progress
should
be measured
. While I
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agree
that
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economic
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progress
is essential, I believe that other forms of
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progress
are
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just
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important
.

There are three key reasons why
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economic
growth
is considered
by
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governments
around the world to be the fundamental metric for national
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progress
.
First
, a healthy economy results in a more satisfied citizenry as unemployment is lower than during periods of
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economic
unrest. Second,
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economic
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progress
generates more tax revenue for
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governments
. This in turn
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allows
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governments
to invest in social services, healthcare, education, military or whatever else they
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see
as necessary.
Finally
, a strong economy can
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help
a
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country
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improve
or maintain a
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country’s
international reputation, which
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allows
for more influence and trading power on the global stage.

Nonetheless, other forms of
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progress
that exist independent of
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economic
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progress
can be
equally
relevant in measuring a
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country’s
success. A
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country’s
adult literacy rate,
for example
, can be
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used
to measure social equality
as well
as
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economic
growth potential. This is
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because
literate adults are able to partake in skilled labor and are
also
likely to pass on their literacy
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skills
to the
next
generation. Another key measure of
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progress
is how well the
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country
is protecting its natural environment. Regardless of the wealth of a
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country
, it will not have a satisfied and healthy population if the environment is in ruin.
Alternatively
, the
overall
happiness of its residents can be an
extremely
relevant measure of a
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country’s
success.

In conclusion
, while it is obvious that
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economic
health is a key marker of a
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country’s
success, other educational, environmental, and psychological metrics are
equally
significant.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. ). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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