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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. ). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. v.11

People primarily enrol in a college or university to achieve the necessary education and degree they require to build a career. Apart from the career, people seek higher studies to gain knowledge, to enhance social status and learn more about diverse cultures. The current society and its educational structures are far different than they had been a century back when a self-educated person could gain a good career and parents could arrange private tutors to ensure their children’s education. But in today’s world, universities are the authority to declare a person to have the necessary education to be ready for the job. People are going to universities because this is the most common way of getting the education. The sole purpose of a college or university is to ensure the proper theoretical and moral education to build the ideal citizens the country needs and this is the system which is unquestionably accepted by the society. People who do not have the plan to use their certificate to get a job either because they have other career plans or may be blessed with inherited fortune. Many go to these educational institutes to learn values, gather ideas and education they require to be good humans. In fact, education is a borderline between a savage person and a good man and this is another reason the society has adopted the idea of education for all. Some people go to universities to get further education to enhance their horizon or to improve their job position and salary. Others go to the colleges and universities to let the world know that they are educated. Funny this may seem but many people simply consider the higher education as the status they require to get a higher position in the society.
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primarily
enrol in a college or
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university
to achieve the necessary
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education
and degree they require to build a
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career
. Apart from the
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career
,
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people
seek higher studies to gain knowledge, to enhance social status and learn more about diverse cultures.

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current
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society
and its educational structures are far
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different
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than
they had been a century back when a self-educated person could gain a
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good
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career
and parents could arrange private tutors to ensure their children’s
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education
.
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in
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today
’s world,
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universities
are the authority to declare a person to have the necessary
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education
to be ready for the job.
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are going to
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universities
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because
this is the most common way of getting the
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education
. The sole purpose of a college or
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university
is to ensure the proper theoretical and moral
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education
to build the ideal citizens the country needs and this is the system which is
unquestionably
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accepted
by the
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society
.
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who do not have the plan to
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use
their certificate to
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get
a job either
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because
they have other
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career
plans or may
be blessed
with inherited fortune.
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Many
go to these educational institutes to learn values, gather
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ideas
and
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education
they require to be
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good
humans. In fact,
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education
is a borderline between a savage person and a
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good
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man
and this is another reason the
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society
has adopted the
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idea
of
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education
for all.

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Some
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people
go to
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universities
to
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get
further
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education
to enhance their horizon or to
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improve
their job position and salary. Others go to the colleges and
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universities
to
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let
the world know that they
are educated
.
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Funny
this may
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seem
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but
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many
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people
simply
consider the higher
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education
as the status they require to
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get
a higher position in the
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society
.
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IELTS essay People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. ). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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