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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v.15

People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v. 15
Students attend formal educational institutes for many different factors. I personally believe that knowledge has multiple dimensional impacts in personality making. Higher education centres help the people in learning of knowledge, skill, communication, competitive lifestyle, grooming, personality making and building of confidence and career. Some people join them for the sake of getting degrees only. A few decades ago people were not well averred about a variety of education and about the outcome of certain degree and skill. Nowadays the trend has increased for youth in attending universities and colleges. Huge proportions of people plan their career and then get their education accordingly.   Some students opt to these institutes for the sake of professional education. Doctors, engineers, financial consultant learn knowledge, skill, implementation of knowledge and also get degree and licence to practice from these organisations. These institutes provide competitive environments that make them more polished and skilled. Some students get indulged into politics and after their education, they choose politics as their career. Although most of the students join these institutes in very purposeful manner but some people join them unplanned. Children of elite class join these education centres for the sake of fun only. Few female students complete their education very successfully and after completing their studies they like to get married and keep on staying at their home. Just for the sake of comparison if we analyse people who got their education from universities and colleges with those who got these degrees by studying distant education resources, we will get amazing differences. Students from many prestigious institutions will be better groomed, professional and hard working as compared to others. In short colleges and universities improve the human personality from many angles.   They award degrees and try to make the wonderful citizens also. To summarise, higher education centres are mandatory in building a Nation.
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attend formal educational institutes for
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factors. I
personally
believe that
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knowledge
has multiple dimensional impacts in personality making. Higher
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education
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centres
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help
the
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people
in learning of
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knowledge
,
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skill
, communication, competitive lifestyle, grooming, personality making and building of confidence and career.
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Some
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people
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join
them for the
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sake
of getting
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degrees
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only
.

A few decades ago
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people
were not well averred about a variety of
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education
and about the outcome of certain
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degree
and
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skill
. Nowadays the trend has increased for youth in attending universities and colleges. Huge proportions of
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people
plan their career and then
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get
their
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education
accordingly
.
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students
opt to these institutes for the
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sake
of professional
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education
. Doctors, engineers, financial consultant learn
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knowledge
,
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skill
, implementation of
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knowledge
and
also
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get
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degree
and
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licence
to practice from these
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organisations
. These institutes provide competitive environments that
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make
them more polished and skilled.
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Some
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students
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get
indulged into politics and after their
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education
, they choose politics as their career.

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students
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join
these institutes in
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very
purposeful manner
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but
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some
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people
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join
them unplanned. Children of elite
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class
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join
these
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education
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centres
for the
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sake
of fun
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only
. Few female
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students
complete their
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education
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successfully
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married and
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on staying at their home.

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for the
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of comparison if we
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analyse
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who
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got
their
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from universities and colleges with those who
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these
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degrees
by studying distant
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resources, we will
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get
amazing differences.
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from
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prestigious institutions will be better groomed, professional and
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hard working
as compared to others.

In short colleges and universities
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improve
the human personality from
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many
angles.
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They award
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degrees
and try to
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make
the wonderful citizens
also
. To
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, higher
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education
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centres
are mandatory in building a Nation.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? v. 15

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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